Open Poetry #38 |
Recalling The Cold Sea. |
Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
You were alive then, i mean really alive. The long hours of happy laughter, on endless summer days;the rock pools, the hushing waves. Sunshine sheening your face, tousled hair in soft rain, and you will always be that way, sweet child in time;frozen featured sister of mine. How would you look? be? To me now? Gone to a world far removed from here, but each day tightens a grip inside me, since the sea beckoned and you fell beneath waves, forever dreaming of mortal life, forever haunted by your slow slide, beneath a cold sea. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
OMG! This is heart-ripping! reminds me of the Titanic what emotion, what a scene...wow |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Phil, chilling but fantastic write. This soul shall remain with you forever, for you've kept her spirit afloat with these loving words. Heart hugs to you. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
The wonderful thing about this creation is how the end so perfectly frames the work. I know I am explaining this badly, but the beginning is perfect and the ending surpasses even that. A beautiful piece. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A heart aching....to be sure. Whether fiction or fact, this grips. Thank you for sharing. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Thank you for replying to this everybody, it is in fact fiction. A tv programe lead me to thinking of how i would be, if as in this situation, a younger sister had been taken, drown and been forever the same age, never growing old but always frozen in time, how would i feel? thank you so much for commenting, on what was at first an experiment, then something that i am now proud to have created from seemingly ''a feeling''.. Goldenrose. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I came by to take a peek, just for a few minutes and my heart was touched by this piece, beautiful work, one of my favorites of yours! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Thank you ARH for your kind reply... Goldenrose. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
You are welcome! good to see your poetry growing and more alive than ever! ~ARH |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I saw in one of the replies that you wrote, how this poem came into being. The believability of your words illustrates the depth of your talent ~ and empathy. Loving Light, Linda |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sad, but expressed well, a dedication which is long remembered through the sands of time...well done |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You paint the life so vividly it makes the loss more poignant... much as it would surely be. *S* |
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