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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2006-07-15 09:06 PM

This will be my 3rd poem and probly the worst one yet.
The other day in class we were asked to write a poem about how we felt and ofcourse boring old me came up with this....

You told me i was special,
but i knew very well that what you had just said wasn't ment for me at all.

So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed,
I don't give out quickes,
nor do i do one night stands,
I'm just music's number one fan.

But i am someone special,
I dont care how i look,
I will frount the word united,
Hold my head up high,
For i am proud to be a Bloody Australian with a sparkle in my eye.

P.S; I do not expect you to like it, but ur critisisum is welcome.

TinaTrivett
Senior Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 569

1 posted 2006-07-15 09:13 PM

I like it!

Especially this part:

"So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed"

I think you put your words together nicely in this piece.

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2006-07-15 09:16 PM

Thanks Tina.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-07-16 08:33 AM

I like it

divine chaos
Senior Member

since 2006-07-09

Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon

4 posted 2006-07-16 12:39 PM

So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed,
I don't give out quickes,
nor do i do one night stands,
I'm just music's number one fan.
*************************

love these lines

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

5 posted 2006-07-18 02:55 AM

Thanx Every1 for ur lovley comments, they are very much appriciated.

GothicCherry
Member

since 2008-09-16

Posts 471
TN

6 posted 2008-12-17 08:50 AM

I found a bit of humor in this piece. Lol. I liked it.

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