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The Bluebird And The Purple Flame
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The Bluebird And The Purple Flame |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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The Bluebird And The Purple Flame (it’s burning through it’s burning) I’ve never seen the bluebird in this place of course the turtle always (and the flame the flame) clunking by on his own errand like a turtle that will die without or die in water or never but he knows the ways and he cannot be stayed or turned from them (what time is it in forever?) blue quiet song of wing and wind defying oh the crows the crows know nothing of the purple flame nothing but the bluebird even this robin if she watches they too can see it growing around our resting place (come with me I will teach you rest) bluebird is more facile and a keeper too of flame wing flicker hold the crows at bay they will not cross their lake to splinter the day with strident (where is where is everywhere?) and the turtle strides resolute knows where the goal will find a way walking but the bird blue flitter on a branch edge aside the leaves (burning through to the air it is burning) down to ground and back to leaves to ground to another careful leading straying near and toward a resting a place under the crow jangle breeze there from over across and here the green green the white primrose like scallops here yellow faces turning up (ask a dare what is all what?) we will see him if he chooses chooses will walk among them choosing and this bird who consents already just at the edge a purple shimmer no breeze can fan nor fade (burning through now it is burning) nor any dark thing sing above the sound of it [This message has been edited by Ratleader (06-29-2006 09:47 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would like to smile, but this resembles my mind set so much, I don't know if I should... weighty gravity comes to mind... flitting about comes to mind as well... but the glue is sensitivity... it is what holds this poem, and any poet together... we sense all of the things that go wrong in lives; we activate what is required to live; and then we hold on to the rainbow, bluebirds, yellow orioles... all of the things that we see, but are few and far between... you have concreted a poem that I felt earlier, so I shall now pen it... not to match, let alone outdo you [wouldn't know how to do that...] but the inner silence has been split and it has been too long. I must write the may poem....  Thank you for the shove. My knees are bruised from the gravel. Somewhere in all of the above is a thank you a do it again and a reverence that your tongue found a poem to rehearse often.... to other ears... them that don't know passion... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well drat...I just simply forgot what I was going to say here after reading such a profound piece and then Karilea's stunning reply but I know it put me in a mood I love to be in |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dixie....I know what you are saying and I do agree....they both have given us a gem of a read... and Ed, good to see your laser point pen at work.... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
wing flicker hold the crows at bay they will not cross their lake to splinter the day with strident (where is where is everywhere?) and the turtle strides resolute knows where the goal will find a way walking I have read this in the middle of the night ... last night and it kept beckoning me today ... There is a sound of awe I perceive. Love, Margherita |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, it's been so long since I've read you, I forgot what I was missing, not only you, but your spiritual guidence, within the heartbeat of words you gather in depth, humbleness, not to mention diversity...you touch the enzyme of sound, keeping everything else working, defy gravity, by placing yourself in the center, seriously considering long hard walks... and it is from those walks that you climb, with patience, truth of understanding and...so much more God rest you and thank you for sharing you |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RatMan~ 'oh the crows the crows know nothing of the purple flame nothing but the bluebird even this robin if she watches they too can see it growing around our resting place (come with me I will teach you rest)' Ahhhh, that's my poet ... you 'teach'~ This is just the way it should be~  *Huglets* for the *gifting* of you~  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
we will see him if he chooses chooses will walk among them choosing and this bird who consents already just at the edge a purple shimmer I've read this several times.... stealing poem moments from the day like an addict hovering near his next fix... and I've yet to be able to remember to breathe as I read it! To say this is fantastic is to show my vocabulary limitations... for it is so much more. *S* I could copy so many lines... for you've given us a sensory banquet... but I keep returning to these... maybe because it's all about choice... choosing to accept or deny what we are offered... both that which we understand and that we must take on faith. Reading this is stepping inside a symphony... being the music as well as listening. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
An amazing write..enjoyed this..thank you.. Goldenrose. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oh, I love those striving turtles... but flitting bluebirds flitting? I suppose that would generally be me  |
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Poetic Concept Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 66God's Fingerprint |
I think this is beautiful written and without the structure it would not be as nearly as wonderful. I think that the structure takes away from this at the same time. I had to read this at least four times just to get a basic knowledge of what u r talking about the structure is so difficult and unattractive. I hate to "have" to reread something because the structure...anyways I think that besides the structure this is a wonderful piece and I semi-enjoyed it honestly speaking...good job elevation is the key. Return the favor on Valentines "How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live" Anonymous (Unknown) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well, I don't do 'em all that way -- I probably write in more styles than any other person in PiP....you may see a sonnet next! Seriously, writing of spirit is tremendously hard, if you try to do it right. You have to reach beyond words, because there simply aren't words, even in this huge language of ours. When I scatter one like this, it's very much intended, and sometimes it is for exactly the reason you cite, to slow the reader down and let the feeling catch up with the words. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (06-30-2006 01:05 AM).] |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Drifted down the page like a falling leaf Ratleader. Enjoyed! :-) |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed If a poet is made of words then I could reply to this...but there are other things, things that have no words...somehow you have written them. The poet in me has no words for the feeling of this poem...so I will tell you that I feel this poem from that other place and trust that you will understand. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ So needing to slowly wander your thoughts again this day~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Would like to hear this one read aloud, with my eyes closed. |
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