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Color Of Deceit
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Color Of Deceit |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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You tossed your cloak tinted in betrayal there by the doorway and stepped into the suite of domestic stability, all the while wearing that sly fox grin. You wore your cunning well for awhile until it wore thin and the fabric of you showed through leaving nothing more than frayed remnants of who you seduced me into believing that you were, but like all things that no longer shine I discarded the gem that had long since lost it's polish and turned dull, because after all; I never cared for the color of deceit anyhow..... seek the flame within yourself |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you tell 'em  good write! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I don't even think deceit has a color other than the sadness it leaves behind if sadness has a color... Sighing hugs M |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I knew when I saw the title, and clicked on this, it would be like a walk down some movie scene, so descriptive, so heartfelt and emotional...Good jobber Donna this... You tossed your cloak tinted in betrayal there by the doorway and stepped into the suite of domestic stability, all the while wearing that sly fox grin. mmmm, mmmmm, what descriptions...lived with that man for years...makes us stronger doesn't it... You wore your cunning well for awhile until it wore thin and the fabric of you showed through leaving nothing more than frayed remnants of who you seduced me into believing that you were it is amazing, your living with someone, and you think you know them...?????? I never cared for the color of deceit anyhow..... oft times I think of this...my youthful eyes, the deep deep trust...and how he must have laughed to himself...yanno, he called me the other week, and I had no desire to ever hear from him again, and told him so...actually, I was insulted that he did call...insulted that he thought...yanno??? [This message has been edited by LeeJ (06-28-2006 10:53 AM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"I never cared for the color of deceit anyhow....." Excellent write. JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Donna..." You Go Girl " More power to you. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Excellently expressed , when you discover what deceit was lurking beneath the cover Hope |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
It was the best of times... it was the worst of times. Close the book. Now... On to Great Expectations !!!!! ::smiles:: Powerful write! ((( Donna ))) |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Donna, this is an excellent poem, with a superb ending, but I am so sorry for your pain in it. I agree with all the responses, especially Dixie's and Paul's. Lee, good for you! (Talking about your last paragraph.) Loved your response for many reasons, Uriah Heep! - Owl |
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lokiwolf Junior Member
since 2006-06-27
Posts 31 |
wonderful poem it was so descriptive I liked especily the second verse/paragragh |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*sneaking in* ah...you met him too? "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Very powerful GS, and well written. |
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FiercestCalm Junior Member
since 2006-06-24
Posts 31michigan |
laughing @ susan's comment. i think we've all met this one. but, as you so eloquently put it here: "You wore your cunning well for awhile until it wore thin and the fabric of you showed through" their true fabric always shows through eventually. i think i'll keep this one in the 'you go girl!' inspirational file  "You can do no great things, just small things with great Love."~Mother Theresa |
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dreamdc Member
since 2005-11-11
Posts 54Utah, USA |
Its always hard when you think you've found him...but really you've found him, his baggage, his lies, and his talent to weave those lies together. Personally, I think the color of deceit is baby poop yellow/brown! I really liked this, maybe because I've seen the color of deceit in the eyes of someone I love. Thank you so much for sharing! Danielle |
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Serena Junior Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 47 |
It always hurts to find that a person wasn't showing you who they really were. But it's a thing that happens often enough as of late. Very beautiful poetry, I really love the last few lines. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Absolutely love this - poignant, powerful, extremely well-expressed! I relate very much so, a few people came to mind while reading this....I know the pain of realization all too well.....and am saving this~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
That was a very hard write and I give you a standing ovation for it. I went through the same thing and you do get through it. Huggs Kimberly |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Well said...James |
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