This Broken Heart (A Quatern)

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Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

0 posted 2006-01-24 10:35 PM

This Broken Heart
~*Marge Tindal*~

This broken heart still falls apart
At the mere mention of your name
These pieces of a puzzled break
Come back to fit me once again

I feel the sounds that sound the same
This broken heart still falls apart
Scattered tokens of love about
Resurfacing to cry my heart

One glance from you still wounds me deep
I bleed in deny of the pain
This broken heart still falls apart
Emotions I cannot maintain

The circle of love is empty
I stand alone with broken heart
Holding on to used to be dreams
This broken heart still falls apart

A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains.
It is similar to the Kyrielle and the Retourne.
It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.
The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fouth line of stanza four.
A quatern has eight syllables per line.
It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme scheme.

***Challenging myself with some different poetic forms***

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

The Lady
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The Southwest

1 posted 2006-01-24 10:43 PM

It's a perfect Quatern, Marge and a lovely piece of work. I like it!

HopeS
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Perth Western Australia

2 posted 2006-01-25 12:01 PM

Sad , yet wonderfully expressed ," Holding used to be dreams " thats just what happens

Hope

Trillium

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3 posted 2006-01-25 12:07 PM

Dear Marge:

You obviously met the challenge very well!

Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

Joyce Johnson

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Washington State

4 posted 2006-01-25 02:24 AM

Bravo Marge. Perfectly done and touching too. Love, joyce

Fee
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5 posted 2006-01-25 02:59 AM

Nicely written, and a touch sad.

Big Hugs, Fee

Expressions,
are the most important aspects, they create impressions

0'.".'0 Just
((T)) Thinking
(..)(..) Of you
(```)_(```)

RedStoneEB
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6 posted 2006-01-25 04:34 AM

What is the broken heart when broken just stays on memories and thoughts of the past

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2006-01-25 05:55 AM

Nicely done Marge! Much enjoyed.

Muys
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8 posted 2006-01-25 06:54 AM

You challenging yourself always.
I think it is your character
my dear ~~*Marge*~~
and I love it.
Hug Muys

Betty
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9 posted 2006-01-25 07:43 AM

I really like this Marge & appreciate the explanation too.
Love ya,
Betty

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

10 posted 2006-01-25 07:44 AM

ms marge..you do them quatro's well..(grin) enjoyed this one

tracie66
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11 posted 2006-01-26 02:29 AM

challenge well met Margie girl

and winged ~hugs~

floating your way sweetie.

Tracie

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

suthern

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12 posted 2006-01-26 09:15 AM

Beautiful work, my friend... the recurring line just adds to the poignancy. *S*

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

13 posted 2006-01-27 06:01 PM

Thank you ALL for your comments on this one ... to be able to work feelings into a form that I haven't used before, and that it is pleasing to each of you, is a +plus+ to me~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com
[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (01-27-2006 07:34 PM).]

skyshine

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14 posted 2006-01-27 07:11 PM

Sweetly sad poem--and what a great idea to challenge yourself with new forms of poetry! I'll have to try that sometime! :rainbow"

~sky

I hope someday you get the chance to live like you were dying....
~Tim McGraw

jody5
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15 posted 2006-01-27 07:55 PM

Marge your poem touches me all the way to my soul. It captures my feelings and I enjoy reading your work so much. I thank God you are my friend. Huggs Kim

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

16 posted 2006-01-27 07:58 PM

Ah Marge..I thought I had signed this one!
I know I read it..*a senior moment?*

Wonderful piece.
Hugs~Nancy

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

17 posted 2006-01-27 09:43 PM

Well, whatever type of poetry you do, you do it, very well.

JamesMichael
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18 posted 2006-01-28 12:02 PM

Nice...James

nakdthoughts
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19 posted 2006-01-28 08:37 AM

you are the +plus+ , Marge

reading you, always

M

2dalimit
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20 posted 2006-01-28 11:16 AM

As always, much enjoyed and a challenge well met.

Thanks, Melton

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

21 posted 2006-01-29 12:42 PM

Thank you, kind friends~
I write to share ... you've each made me abundantly rich with your replies~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

22 posted 2006-01-29 09:02 AM

YOur poetry is always outstanding, and this poem is no exception, thank you for sharing
((hugs))
Charisma

Katerie
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23 posted 2006-01-29 09:04 AM

Perfect quatern.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

24 posted 2006-01-30 07:47 PM

Friends~
You all are just the BESTEST ... thank you from the heart of my little bottom~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

MGROVES

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25 posted 2006-01-30 09:55 PM

i just love learning something new. thanks, and great job

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

hoot_owl_rn
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26 posted 2006-01-31 08:47 AM

Marge...I think you could accomplish any type of poetry you set out to write and write it well...this is certainly proof in the pudding

Well done

Ruth

sandgrain
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27 posted 2006-02-04 04:29 PM

I really wonder about these being a challenge to you, Marge. It seems as though the differnt forms, subjects, shapes and words are but a 'table of contents' to the well done pieces within you.

You're truly one of a kind!

Rae

Martie

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28 posted 2006-02-04 05:18 PM

Marge/sis....I love this form, and you!

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