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A Lush Green Pasture
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A Lush Green Pasture |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality 
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A lush green pasture that reminds me of you. The sky was in blue, when I told you we're through. My reveiw would not renew, so words overdue, rang true. She had to ask and cry, why now goodbye ? For we were worlds apart, a short lived affair without heart. Nobody's fault, just that our ages, found us in different stages. Blame it on me, a passion infatuation, blind not to see. So go onward and seek, to find someone unique, that's not an antique, one last kiss on the cheek. A lush green pasture that reminds me of you. paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you [This message has been edited by shades of paul (05-07-2006 06:12 PM).] |
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Katerie Member
since 2006-01-27
Posts 92Central New York |
Some of the rhyme seems a bit forced, but it's not too inhibiting. I like. |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Well I certainly will keep my day job,thanks paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Paul I liked this poem a bunch break ups are never easy. huggs Kimberly |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Thank You Kimberly...................paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting how in the beginning age is seen as no problem, but when reasons for a break-up come up, age difference is high upon the list...I have had some personal bad experiences with age difference...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I enjoyed this and loved the rhyming |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Interesting That all should stand so firm Yet in weakness do we make mistakes Or voyage on exploration Of Take I look for a magic in words And yours I like But the binding Old writing habits Are tell them what you going to tell them Tell them Tell them what you told them The third I couldn't find Dave |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Thank you for the reply James, paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Passing shadows, I,m glad you liked the rhyming, I started to wonder if it would have been better without it. I start most of my poems not intending to rhyme, but it creeps in anyway. An old habit I guess. thanks paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
Dave thanks for the reply, (you really got me wondering trying to figure it out). But don't worry cause when I do I will tell them. paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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