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shades of paul
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0 posted 2006-05-07 05:13 PM


A lush green pasture that reminds me of you.
The sky was in blue, when I told you we're through.
My reveiw would not renew, so words overdue, rang true.
She had to ask and cry, why now goodbye ?
For we were worlds apart, a short lived affair without heart.
Nobody's fault, just that our ages, found us in different stages.
Blame it on me, a passion infatuation, blind not to see.
So go onward and seek, to find someone unique, that's not an antique, one last kiss on the cheek.
A lush green pasture that reminds me of you.

paul



shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

[This message has been edited by shades of paul (05-07-2006 06:12 PM).]

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Katerie
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1 posted 2006-05-07 08:26 PM


Some of the rhyme seems a bit forced, but it's not too inhibiting.  I like.
shades of paul
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2 posted 2006-05-07 09:21 PM


Well I certainly will keep my day job,thanks
paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

jody5
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3 posted 2006-05-07 10:55 PM


Paul I liked this poem a bunch break ups are never easy.

huggs Kimberly


shades of paul
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4 posted 2006-05-08 07:46 AM


Thank You Kimberly...................paul

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JamesMichael
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5 posted 2006-05-09 06:52 PM


Interesting how in the beginning age is seen as no problem, but when reasons for a break-up come up, age difference is high upon the list...I have had some personal bad experiences with age difference...James
passing shadows
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6 posted 2006-05-09 06:57 PM


I enjoyed this and loved the rhyming
Bodger
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7 posted 2006-05-09 07:01 PM


Interesting

That all should stand so firm

Yet in weakness do we make mistakes

Or voyage on exploration

Of Take

I look for a magic in words

And yours I like

But the binding

Old writing habits

Are tell them what you going to tell them
Tell them
Tell them what you told them

The third I couldn't find

Dave

shades of paul
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8 posted 2006-05-09 09:07 PM


Thank you for the reply James,       paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

shades of paul
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9 posted 2006-05-09 09:11 PM


Passing shadows, I,m glad you liked the rhyming, I started to wonder if it would have been better without it. I start most of my poems not intending to rhyme, but it creeps in anyway. An old habit I guess. thanks
paul  

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

shades of paul
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10 posted 2006-05-09 09:16 PM


Dave thanks for the reply, (you really got me wondering trying to figure it out). But don't worry cause when I do I will tell them.
paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

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