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The Water Is Rising
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The Water Is Rising |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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I can feel a catch coming on see it floating there through warm water safe water like a fishing line hook line and sink her try to keep above water try to keep above we're reaching eye level my lungs can only take so much before the water bursts through I become the ocean my molecules spread I can't feel my legs anymore let's play mix and match with my atoms we'll start again and this time will be different what if we could divide into peices that could connect and collide to coincide with tomorrow would it ever have to be today? the water is rising and I can't see past the horizon I see waves of gold silk for the tread let's wrap this up before the tide comes in |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...I did love that ending! awesome write! |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
Wonderful write. I love how you became part of the ocean. keep it up! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
what if we could divide into peices that could connect and collide to coincide with tomorrow would it ever have to be today? I have always considered poetry that can grab my attention, and make me think to be very good poetry. Your poetry does that to me... it makes me think, and keeps my attention. Extremely well done, exhale.  |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Amazing work exhale. This is my favorite: "hook line and sink her" Hard hitting. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Out of that mystic sea, creation came and so do poems. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
Uplifting and invigorating. I see a sence of renewal in this post. A very strong write with a delicate handle on emotion. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
There is an under current here..(pardon my pun)...it is like you are saying you are drowning in the world..your surounding area..almost like you have receded to your basic level..that of water..that connects us all...now you have to go with the flow...and swim with some big sharks in life...time to swimm free..find your way.. Thank you for giving me pause to think..but then you always do that.. Goldenrose. ''As the deer pants for steams of water, so my soul pants for you O God'' |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
I can normally out some kind of thread You have woven a web That maybe Your teeth In words Have untied Dave |
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