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shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2006-04-30 12:09 PM

LIKE WATER

you say
you want truth,
but truth
is like water:
it’s the shape
of the sky;
it’s the shape
of this glass;
it’s the shape
of my mouth.
which truth
do you want?

you say
you want love,
but love
is like water:
it can bathe you;
it can cool you;
it can drown you.
which love
do you want?

you say
you want me,
but I
am like water:
I’m a mist;
I’m a splash;
I am ice.
which me
do you want?

you say
you want water,
but water
is like truth;
water
is like love;
water
is like me.
which water
do you want?

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2006-04-30 09:09 AM

I am enjoying your poetry very much. I like your style and the way you think, not necessarily what you think, but definitely the way you do so - thinking is a very exciting thing for me. I also find your poetry very clever and beautifully structured (one small example is the five stanzas in Five Card Stud - I am not acquainted with most card games, but I gather that there is significance in five cards in poker).

Glad to meet all four of you (water, mist, splash, ice)! Hopefully "she" wants all four!

- Owl

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2006-04-30 09:15 AM

Hi, shirtless! Welcome to pipTalk!

I like a man who speaks the truth!

Giving you a warm, welcoming hug,
Earth Angel

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2006-04-30 11:42 AM

All may quench a thirst.

write on..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

BROTHER JOHN
Member

since 2006-04-06

Posts 386

4 posted 2006-04-30 02:55 PM

THANKS SHIRTLESS,

I WONDER,TOO, WHICH SHAPE SPIRIT TAKES?

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-04-30 04:30 PM

I like this

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

6 posted 2006-05-01 12:05 PM

Oh, I like this very much.

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

7 posted 2006-05-18 07:40 AM

Tony,
just 2 words.... Love it.

:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2006-05-18 10:53 AM

shirtless....I really like this...was drawn to the title...water...so flexible...wonderful the way you applied it here. Welcome to Pip!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2006-05-18 06:40 PM

Enjoyed...James

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2006-05-18 07:31 PM

Well done - much enjoyed !!
Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

11 posted 2006-05-19 08:09 PM

Anthony~

I love this - poignant and softly powerful; You took a well-used image and made it unique and your own. I relate to this and look forward to reading more poems of yours

I'm saving this in my library.

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Archea
Member

since 2006-05-13

Posts 65
United States

12 posted 2006-05-19 08:16 PM

i liked the rythm in this one. very nice.

Debo
Member

since 2006-04-18

Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.

13 posted 2006-05-21 05:56 PM

Well this poem just fits me to a tee
I really enjoyed reading this today
Now which one do you want? *he-he*

Debo

sweetberry
Member

since 2006-03-29

Posts 125

14 posted 2006-05-24 02:20 AM

Nice write!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

15 posted 2006-05-24 08:57 PM

neat write...

I like the way you turned it all around and gave it a twist....

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