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Killing doubt
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Killing doubt |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla 
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loniless that takes me to an unmarked grave settle my soul is what they all will say the right one will come along for you so don't be so down,don't be so blue for you won't be alone forever more,no a person like you is a special gift that shant be used or torn as i listen to the sweet delusion words i feed my brain to get me by i scrunch up on the bed and begin to cry |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is very sad and the descriptors you use give it a childlike quality. I like the images but found the lack of capitals and the irregular spacing slowed my reading. It's worth another look though if you decide to edit. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand so well  |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
thank you yes it does need some editing i just have the habit of typing then pressing enter it destroys my flow. but i gotta remeber to go bac k and adjust things. spelling is my downfall |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Foxy, I believe your lack of correct punctuatiion and etc is part of your cry. I hear you. |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
thank you |
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