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A GIFT FROM ABOVE
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A GIFT FROM ABOVE |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
This is my second sonnet.I write mostly in sonnet form since this speaks to me.All my poems are unfinished and I invite your comments. I heard the whistling wooing mid the night And as I listened, I began to hear Harmonic sounds within the forest's tier And pondered nature's gift to my delight. From foreign frontiers, by an age-old rite, Ordained the winds to ferry this gift here And elsewhere with its dashing charioteer Who blazes skies and shakes earth by sheer might! The rumbling roll of drums I clearly heard Afar and then ... their echoing refrain Resounded like hot hoofs of a wild herd! Mid darkness with expectant parched terrain, The curtains slowly parted with a word As this gift graced the stage: ... the dancing rain! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this had me on the edge of my seat! Very powerful write! |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
from start to end I was captured by this wonderful pounding poem of rain Debo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BROTHER JOHN A very good write, enjoyed the read. |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Amen Brother John! Absolutey divine! :-) |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Passing Shadows, You are gracious with your words. No, you keep us all on the edge with your thoughts. I like this and I call it the "cutting edge" where now meets the "what could be". |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Debo, Thank you for taking the time to read this poem. Too, thank you for your kind remarks. I am always open for comments. I am a novice and humbly admit it. I see my poems as always 'under construction.' |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
I liked this very much, many times the rain can be a bother, or an univited party crasher, but when it is viewed as a gift from above.....sigh...I wish it was raining here |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Seymour, Thank you for your kind remarks. But more so, I thank you for your gift of writing. Poetry, like art, should "blow" our minds to see a new way. Your writings do this. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Steven, Thank you for taking time to read this poem. To say, it is divine is a stretch. If you mean it helps you think of the the Divine, then I'll accept that. Blessings on you, my fellow traveler. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Luminosity, Thank you for taking time to read this. Too, thank you for your kind remarks. I really like your pen name. I have a good feeling as I read your lines, I will see more beauty. |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
LOL Let the hooves of the wild herd heat...until they are molded into the the walk of a beast of burden that can be ridden triumphantly...Then the dancing rains will come and cool them into those of a glorious white steed of purity. Don't mind me. ::smiles:: I see what I see. ::bows:: |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
The sonnet is not an easy form BROTHER JOHN, but you do it well. I love Steve's play on your name. It's divine! |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Uriah, Your comments are most welcome. Yes, we see what we see and all see in part. Diversity is the name of the game, but so many are afraid of this game since they have tunnel vision. Thanks for new insights. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
To The Lady: Thank you for your time. Yes, the sonnet fits my frame. I do try to set the stage and then "turn" it to a special point I want to make. Often I fail, but the joy of writing sonnets or any poem, is the poem itself. I guess our essence, Lady, is that we are each a poem and therefore "makers of poems." Thank you for your encouragement to a novice. |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
Brother John, I too like your name, it has a resonance that is pleasing. I write only when gifted with the words, and have not written in the last week or so...but you can look up some of my work, I think they might be to your liking.  |
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J@red Junior Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 12Alabama |
Very nice. I see a little William Blake Songs of Innocence there myself but that could be just me reading him lately. I love the semi-narrative approach where you get a little story told. Bravo. |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear Jared, I thank you for your remarks. I do indeed know of Blake. But of this work you mentioned, I know not. But, it is remarkable that my poem brought Blake's words to your mind. I am honored since I am a novice. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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BROTHER JOHN Member
since 2006-04-06
Posts 386 |
Dear James, Thanks for stopping by for the read. Your word nice seemed pregnant and I thank you. |
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