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BROTHER JOHN
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0 posted 2006-04-28 02:34 AM


This is my second sonnet.I write mostly in sonnet form since this speaks to me.All my poems are unfinished and I invite your comments.

I heard the whistling wooing mid the night
And as I listened, I began to hear
Harmonic sounds within the forest's tier
And pondered nature's gift to my delight.
From foreign frontiers, by an age-old rite,
Ordained the winds to ferry this gift here
And elsewhere with its dashing charioteer
Who blazes skies and shakes earth by sheer might!

The rumbling roll of drums I clearly heard
Afar and then ... their echoing refrain
Resounded like hot hoofs of a wild herd!

Mid darkness with expectant parched terrain,
The curtains slowly parted with a word
As this gift graced the stage: ... the dancing rain!


© Copyright 2006 BROTHER JOHN - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-04-28 04:21 AM


this had me on the edge of my seat! Very powerful write!
Debo
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2 posted 2006-04-28 08:20 AM


from start to end I was captured by this wonderful pounding poem of rain

Debo

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2006-04-28 08:51 AM


BROTHER JOHN
A very good write, enjoyed the read.

StevenS
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4 posted 2006-04-28 10:05 AM


Amen Brother John! Absolutey divine! :-)
BROTHER JOHN
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5 posted 2006-04-28 01:00 PM


Dear Passing Shadows,

You are gracious with your words.  No, you keep us all on the edge with your thoughts.  I like this and I call it the "cutting edge" where now meets the "what could be".


BROTHER JOHN
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6 posted 2006-04-28 01:04 PM


Dear Debo,

Thank you for taking the time to read this poem. Too, thank you for your kind remarks. I am always open for comments.  I am a novice and humbly admit it.  I see my poems as always 'under construction.'


luminosity
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7 posted 2006-04-28 02:16 PM


I liked this very much, many times the rain can be a bother, or an univited party crasher, but when it is viewed as a gift from above.....sigh...I wish it was raining here
BROTHER JOHN
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8 posted 2006-04-28 02:32 PM


Dear Seymour,

Thank you for your kind remarks. But more so,
I thank you for your gift of writing. Poetry, like art, should "blow" our minds to see a new way.  Your writings do this.


BROTHER JOHN
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9 posted 2006-04-28 02:41 PM


Dear Steven,

Thank you for taking time to read this poem.
To say, it is divine is a stretch. If you mean it helps you think of the the Divine, then I'll accept that.  Blessings on you, my fellow traveler.


BROTHER JOHN
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10 posted 2006-04-28 02:46 PM


Dear Luminosity,

Thank you for taking time to read this.  Too, thank you for your kind remarks. I really like your pen name.  I have a good feeling as I read your lines, I will see more beauty.


XOx Uriah xOX
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11 posted 2006-04-28 05:12 PM


LOL    Let the hooves of the wild herd heat...until they are molded into the the walk of a beast of burden that can be ridden triumphantly...Then the dancing rains will come and cool them into those of a glorious white steed of purity.   Don't mind me.  ::smiles::  I see what I see.   ::bows::
The Lady
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12 posted 2006-04-28 05:42 PM




The sonnet is not an easy form BROTHER JOHN, but you do it well.

I love Steve's play on your name. It's divine!

  

BROTHER JOHN
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13 posted 2006-04-28 06:07 PM


Dear Uriah,

Your comments are most welcome.  Yes, we see what we see and all see in part. Diversity is the name of the game, but so many are afraid of this game since they have tunnel vision.  Thanks for new insights.


BROTHER JOHN
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14 posted 2006-04-28 06:18 PM


To The Lady:

Thank you for your time.  Yes, the sonnet fits my frame.  I do try to set the stage and then "turn" it to a special point I want to make.  Often I fail, but the joy of writing sonnets or any poem, is the poem itself.  I guess our essence, Lady, is that we are each a poem and therefore "makers of poems."  Thank you for your encouragement to a novice.


luminosity
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15 posted 2006-04-28 06:39 PM


Brother John, I too like your name, it has a resonance that is pleasing.  I write only when gifted with the words, and have not written in the last week or so...but you can look up some of my work, I think they might be to your liking.  
J@red
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16 posted 2006-04-28 08:15 PM


Very nice. I see a little William Blake Songs of Innocence there myself but that could be just me reading him lately.

I love the semi-narrative approach where you get a little story told. Bravo.

BROTHER JOHN
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17 posted 2006-04-28 10:15 PM


Dear Jared,

I thank you for your remarks.  I do indeed know of Blake.  But of this work you mentioned,  I know not.  But, it is remarkable that my poem brought Blake's words to your mind.  I am honored since I am a novice.


JamesMichael
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18 posted 2006-04-29 07:51 PM


Nice...James
BROTHER JOHN
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19 posted 2006-04-29 08:18 PM


Dear James,

Thanks for stopping by for the read. Your word nice seemed pregnant and I thank you.


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