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Pain comes from thee
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Pain comes from thee |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
With in thy eyes thy cant describe Thy feeling that will never die Sorrow grows where hope once flowed Pain of thee with misery to be Sadness crashing tears come free Faith let go lost from the unknown Oh thy darkness that surrounds thee Let thy hatred free so thy may see serenity So bitter sweet thy test for revenge thy wishes to take No hope nor great relief comes to thy Seeing thee dismayed falling in thy sea of despair No punishment to thee will take thy feelings away Only pain remands where thee has touched thy soul Nothing will change thy feelings will remain There is so much good in the worst of us, and so much bad in the best of us, that it behooves all of us not to talk about the rest of us. *Robert S [This message has been edited by aliway (04-24-2006 07:36 AM).] |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
I know its not the best but I hoped that you guys could help me out to make it one of them. any comments will be great.  *leah |
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Internalexile Junior Member
since 2006-06-15
Posts 38UK |
I liked it, lots of thee's :P but yeah the listing of emotions in the first stanza was v good! Internalexile Let the moonlight paint your face, let the stars be your cloak... |
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Frank W. Torres Member
since 2006-06-10
Posts 133 |
Nice poem. Sometime change is hard to come by. |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
Thanks you for the replies, they where very nice and yeah there’s a lot of thee's in it. The first part of it is my favorite.  Thank you agene for the replying*Leah |
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