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You Said, "Never Quit"
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You Said, "Never Quit" |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia 
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Here's a verse for Jimmy Perkins May he face his trials 'til his case is closed He kept his dreams within a farm house Until the day the river rose. He always found comfort in the river. Until it took his easy chair. When it took his mother's casket He felt that life was too unfair. Now, he hears the sound of thunder and it makes him stop and wonder if the Good Lord hears his prayers. But, the sunshine comes again and dries up all the mud. All Jimmy has to show for life... is that he survived the flood. God granted him atleast one day more... And with everything that he could pray for... Even though it will be rough He lives on...and it's enough.. Here's a verse for my dear Daddy Pound for pound the toughest man I've known. Life kept throwing sucker punches But he kept on keeping on. He worked with all his heart and mind But always seemed to fail. Tried his best to leave behind Some kind of smoother trail. He left this world a poor man Not even owning the dirt beneath his nails. But, he left behind a family full of fight and filled with pride Believing you don't leave this world as long as theres a slim chance to survive. And you face Death with a struggle and do your best to stay alive. Here's a verse for Burglar Baggins They carried your ashes home today You measured your life and came up lacking and with a gun...took it away. Some folks take a short cut. Leaving loved one's filled with grief. Others try to tough it out and grin through gritted teeth. Did you struggle over half a century... for nine millimeters of relief? I shouldn't judge too harshly. I should try to understand. I know that there's all kinds of hands dealt to each and every man. And you never know how close someone stands to all that he can stand. They fired up your Panhead A deep and rumbling sound. I hid my face and bowed my head. My tears fell to the ground They set your urn upon the saddle Brothers gathered to say their last farewells No one really knew your battle. What you were thinking...no one could tell. But, you always said you were a fighter. A One Percenter that didn't fit. You said don't never let life get you down. Don't let them win and never quit. But...Here you are at journey's end... Having blown yourself clean off the map... They say the proof is in the pudding... Was yours just full of crap? Now I'm home... At last.... alone Cussing the exit that you found. All those years in Vietnam Couldn't take you down. I have so many mixed emotions Strange how it's almost numbing. But my bitterness is toward myself... Because.... I never saw it coming. |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Touching write Uriah, one that I can relate to. Blaming yourself for someones elses actions can be a heavy burden. You know where to lay it. :-) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Interesting way you formatted the individual verses yet pulled them together in such a way that it took me a moment to see it.  I am really enjoying what you offer."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
WOW! This is a Touching write; you have away with words!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ahhh, Larry. It's hard to reply to this emotive poem. It's so well done, with such a keen eye and love. I applaud you!  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Everyone's a one-percenter in one way or another.....but that percent bites deep. Feeling for you on this one, man....and appreciating one truly good poem. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Wonderfully written...each verse just drew you right in to the next. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Uriah, You are a man of uncommon state That drinks his whisky staight. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
well done. it took me a few reads to get a feel for it. i guess i want to say that parts could flow better. part where you chose to keep certain words for their own sake rather than adjust them for the rythm. -majnu |
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