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Wall and Water |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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You keep telling me the earth is in order that fractured light dances in nature, you say its hidden in folds of chaos embedded in the harmony of stars &sounds like poetry a gypsy of sorts lining the chairs just so to catch the next drawing and sketch of black the words you ache for most ? will trickle the dawn after some inspired night letting fingers dance with crescent moon &heavens will bleed dying stars like primary colors ---- rain drops breaking and falling sinking into darkness like trees hanging on the edge of this world on the other side wall and water will define its end even their shadows will be thin, spreading, wandering lost again I will lay in my aloneness my faith untouched not held within these arms that I might see I am lost in grains of stars that once held sweep of waves midnight arrives: the moon hung its stillness on damp grass the water held its reflection waiting for stone to warm and change while winters gather to freeze the drops of water empty in wind ~~**~~ And so it those we live with and should know who elude us But we can still love them we can love completely without complete understanding |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren You are such a word artist...this took my breath away!!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well everyone must be on holiday to have missed this beauty? I read it when you posted it and wanted to come back to it, and glad I did, as it deserves to get read for the value of writing in this incredible poem. Martie is right - you two sometimes I get confused when I read you, as you are both word artists.  Lovely! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You keep telling me the earth is in order that fractured light dances in nature, you say its hidden in folds of chaos embedded in the harmony of stars &sounds like poetry a gypsy of sorts lining the chairs just so to catch the next drawing and sketch of black the words you ache for most ? will trickle the dawn after some inspired night letting fingers dance with crescent moon &heavens will bleed dying stars like primary colors ---- rain drops breaking and falling sinking into darkness like trees hanging on the edge of this world on the other side wall and water will define its end even their shadows will be thin, spreading, wandering lost again I will lay in my aloneness my faith untouched not held within these arms that I might see I am lost in grains of stars that once held sweep of waves midnight arrives: the moon hung its stillness on damp grass the water held its reflection waiting for stone to warm and change ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh my oh my oh my... ~OH SIGH~ I wanted this to go on forever.... Everytime I read you, it validates the reasons why I love & need poetry so much. Lordy me girlie...your muse tis divine.  |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
What a sparkling toss of metaphor and imagery! I was hooked with the first verse and was just swept up in the read beginning to end. You make me believe a stone will "warm and change." My heart broke with the fractured light and picked itself up laughing at the fantasy of nature in this write. Absolutely lovely! ~ Karen |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Reminds me of how much I love reading you.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So very very beautiful.. your writing, your heart...you. Love ya lady~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You keep telling me the earth is in order that fractured light dances in nature, you say its hidden in folds of chaos embedded in the harmony of stars &sounds like poetry even this alone was beautiful... M |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
I love your writing. I say that everytime I come back and reply to one of your poems... but there isn't much more to say than that! -Tara |
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