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OS10-Q4
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I have my own blood on my hands Stains of pains and sins that won't end, Suffering what others can't understand, Doing things that people can't comprehend. Is it evil or a goodness concealed Methods of madness deftly done; Where clever intent is never revealed Using methods often best not begun. You pretend there's nothing to do, Did you quick wash your sins away, Was the challenge too great and beyond you, Are you letting the sleeping dogs to lay. You see my hands dripping in red, There are blades casually here, Seeing it all you hear nothing I said, Filled with misconceptions and numbing fear. Gloom |
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Musicmaker1969 
since 2000-06-25
Posts 589Peterborough, Ontario Canada |
A very different poem for me. As a deputy moderator I wasn't sure this was in the right place because of the content, but you have been here a long time so I trust you know the guidelines very well. I'm not sure what you are saying in your poem - sorry about that, but it does sound almost self-condemning. I hope if you are dealing with a horrible issue, whether it is you or somebody else, you can get help. IF this is just a piece of writing, well done. Sheri Adams Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Musicmaker1969, For taking the time to read and comment. What confuses you might be just the my nature, As a dark and dismal person ( don’t believe Larry I believe his source is tainted) I often am on the edge of what is allowable, Even to the point of having a few of my poems tossed off in the past. OS10-Q4 is just four quatrains about methodology Granted the line “ I have my own blood on my hands” Might be conceived as slightly suicidal, it is not, Anymore than Pilate was of washing the blood off his hands admitting he was a murderer. This is also brought up in the third verse ( same metaphor ) as it turns it back Towards the reader. The Methods can make or break the end As the end can justify the method What a delicate balance they make. Any question on any of my writings can be done here Or via E-mail I try to be responsive If at times a touch slow in my old age. Gloom |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
So Prof, when you say "slow" you don't mean mentally, right?  And by the way I was really hoping for exactly what you described here but was holding out, just in case. Excellent write. And "tainted" seems a little strong. I was thinking more like "insightful". Though Sheri may be right about needing help.  Oh, and one more thing: your titling is a useful filling system but if I were grading papers for a Professor(not that I ever had those qualifications) I would think it lacked creativity. After all isn't part of the idea of writing to draw in readers? Okay, I gotta run before I get kicked out of class! If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Larry C, Another response of noteworthiness from the little boy passing notes in the back of the class. But as for needing help, perhaps I do, It has been mentioned. As for drawing the reader in Hmmmm Lack of creativity Hmmmm Hmmmmm Let me see what I can do with OS11 Naturally it will need to be a little long To give time to draw in and be creative, But I think I have just the right piece of architecture For the job. As always I enjoy your response as well as your writings Gloom |
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