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OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa

0 posted 2006-04-05 03:11 PM



GOODBYE
April 1994

I could find no poetry in your soul;
I couldn’t teach your heart to sing;
You wouldn’t let my spirit fly;
And so I stand here on the moonlit beach
With icy water at my feet
And whistling wind around my ears.
With sad relief, I toss the ashes
Of our might-have-beens
Into the air, and as I do,
I feel the flutter of my wounded spirit
As it breaks free and tries to soar,
But the wind plunges it into the waves below.
It splutters, then struggles to the shore,
And, bird-like, hops before me
As I make my homeward way.
The healing process has begun.

- Owl

© Copyright 2006 Diana van den Berg - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2006-04-05 03:22 PM


sad write but so full of hope

the healing process is slow for sure but eventually we pull through

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
2 posted 2006-04-05 03:36 PM


"And so I stand here on the moonlit beach
With icy water at my feet
And whistling wind around my ears.
With sad relief, I toss the ashes
Of our might-have-beens
Into the air"

OUCH!
Very sad.
But I did enjoy the art of your expression.

JL


The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
3 posted 2006-04-05 05:35 PM




"With sad relief, I toss the ashes
Of our might-have-beens
Into the air"

That's my favorite line too Diana. Your poem is wonderful and it does speak of hope.


OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2006-04-06 12:42 PM


Thank you passing shadows for your kind reply.  Yes, we do get through it, but feeling the pain is part of what helps.

Thank you JL.  Yes, we spent a lot of time on the beach at all times of the day or night, so it was fitting that my poem ended us there.  Thank you for your kindness.

Thank you Kate.  Yes, there is (almost) always hope.

- Owl

StevenS
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since 2005-09-21
Posts 945
L. A. (Lower Alabama)
5 posted 2006-04-06 10:37 PM


It's often is a long road to reach this point. But even with such deep sadness there is much cause for celebration in healing. Touching and beautiful Owl! :-)
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
6 posted 2006-04-08 01:33 AM


Thank you for your kind words, Steven.  Yes, the healing brings more growth than the illusion of what was not.

- Owl

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