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Cheap Whiskey |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643
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She burned like cheap whiskey bittersweet in her jaunt tantalizing each sweet note her lips carved out a story that only the wicked could understand auburn with hints of gold, she was nothing like Ginger Rogers maybe a bit Monroe her style stolen from elegance escaped with each flick of her hips each click of her heels until a melted pool of man surrounded her feet she knew what she had 30 years later and the devil still inside laughter raspy with age spitting out her sweet notes and the hips are a little rusty catching with each step hobbling with each move no pools at her feet but she still burns like cheap whiskey |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Holy smokes girl! What have you been doing? Your work has changed so much! This is a touchstone.  |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank You, thank you....  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Fabulous writing Dominique... Love the burn and the warm of your words. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
thank you Blues |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
This is an incredible poem! You capture your subject and your readers with awsesome eloquence and word paint. A joy to read. ~ Klassy ~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
really good character portrayal here works well |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Klassy and Inked...I am not quite sure what or who I was thinking of when I wrote this but I am so glad that the subject came across well... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
She is all of us. enjoyed."too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
I agree with all the above! A real masterpiece Dominique-Simone! :-) |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Steven and Susan... I agree as well... |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I so much enjoyed this Dominique. The use of your words painted quite the picture. Excellent! ~Sheri |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Thank you Sheri.... I try each time to paint the best picture so that the reader always gets a sense of real life |
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