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shades of paul
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In Reality

0 posted 2006-04-02 06:22 PM


Drunk man is the theme, to this drag of a scene.
He drinks unseen, gets mean and obscene.
State of this drunk, puts me in a funk.
Spins an dark myth, as he finished the fifth.
Polluted with juice, verbal abuse cuts loose.
Search for a translation or coherant conversation.
None to be found, so please silence your sound.
Don't know what is worse, the curse or his verse.
Am not surprised, at the close of his eyes.
How does he fare, as he slumps in the chair.
Sir,Sir, gives his final last slur.
Are you all right?
Of course not, Good Night.
paul




shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-04-02 06:59 PM


this one hits home

good write Paul

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2006-04-02 07:05 PM


'Tis a sad scenario ~ and you captured it well.


EA

shades of paul
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3 posted 2006-04-02 07:26 PM


Well, I hope it doesn't hit too close to home.
Thanks for reading and responding..paul

shades of peace,love,and happiness to you

shades of paul
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4 posted 2006-04-02 07:29 PM


Tis sad indeed,thanks Earth Angel....paul

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