Open Poetry #37 |
Root Rot |
vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I never meant... n e v e r meant to be the bad seed... sc att er ing weeds through your garden in sow... so... douse me with your poison drink plant me here... roots... rotted in thyme... time to go... time to die... grieve... rivers recede... re- seed... perhaps in time... a single blossom... fragrant... r o o t e d safe... secure... as the thorn keeps watch... _______________________ "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
I loved it! It is rare that you see such a good poem that plays with shapes so well! Ben “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Great poem, great presentation, much enjoyed. Huggs Kim |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Greatly enjoyed this.martyjo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
OH! and tsk... "Mary, Mary, Quite Contrary" (I was so wounded m'self...) and this--makes me ache for spring. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
love it... Spring is just around the corner...and yes all those weeds...but at least they are green M |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You've sown your words seeds beautifully down the page. May they blossom into fragrant flowers with the coming of spring! Linda |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I enjoyed the construction of your poem-pure brilliance and cleverness! Must keep this!Many thoughts are brought forth by your seeding. Thanks, miscellanea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A most wonderful and clever write Vicky! I absolutely love the presentation! Well done gal! Hugs~Nancy ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Because of your location, and the theme of your poem, I am wonderfully reminded of Dee, and how she enjoyed her garden and all, every year, every spring, she would call and complain of the work, and yet every fall and every winter, the catalogs filled her home, of some hope for the next season. She also knew that in order to see the beauty, she'd have to ignore the thorns, and accepted them, as she did so many things, as a fact of life. Excellent presentation, Vicky. Thank you for bringing my sister back to me, if for only a moment. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Brilliant all round - word play, presentation, thought processes, interest-level! Very much enjoyed. - Owl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Nicely done! a wonderfully clever presentation of a thorny subject. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Mum, I will admit it, this is waaaay over my head. However, I enjoyed reading you and then He created the horse... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Excellent work. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ You know I like it ... and understand the need of this word-seed~ I would gather the seeds of your sowing, treasuring the fragrance in a new garden, planted where the roots would take hold and remain, foreverly~ GREAT BIG *HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sorry I'm late getting back here... but wanted to offer my heartfelt thanks to each of you... I appreciate your comments and encouragement more than you know... Thank you so much... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Vicky, this reminds me of what's waiting outside. Gotta love it. Enjoyed your creativity here! ....jo |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Vicky...Enjoyed reading you very much, it's been awhile. The rewards of our labor is worth the prick of thorn...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
I find this one somewhat heart-wrenching...it definately tugs at me.. written wonderfully... hugs, g "Home..is for free expression, not for good impression..." |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an excellent style here, excellent theme, much enjoyed! reminds me a bit of e.e.cummings |
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