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Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

0 posted 2006-03-28 05:53 PM

You left me alone in Atlanta
grazing at the bus stop
in a pink slip
chatting up the blue haired lady
with an awkward sense
never mind the daffodils
the smell will never fade
while I wait here catching the sun
in rain's hand

A pocket full of lint
and I'm in Atlanta
washing away the grime
of a night spent
listening
to the morning rising
without complaint
parked neatly
as the bus pulls up
I walk aboard
pink slip
bright smile
and not a clue
where
I'm going.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

1 posted 2006-03-28 05:59 PM

Wow! When you come back from a dry spell you come back Page. It's a knockout!

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

2 posted 2006-03-28 06:00 PM

Thank you Kate, you do not know how much your words mean to me.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-03-28 07:56 PM

I'm sure glad that I didn't move to Atlanta

awesome poem!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2006-03-28 08:26 PM

never mind the daffodils
the smell will never fade
while I wait here catching the sun
in rain's hand

A pocket full of lint
and I'm in Atlanta
washing away the grime
of a night spent
listening
to the morning rising
without complaint

Excellent scribe Page, so many cool lines
all wrapped up in a perfect package..

Very much enjoyed your art here lady.

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

5 posted 2006-03-28 08:36 PM

thank you Gentle and Passing, I am so thrilled you enjoyed it!!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2006-03-28 11:50 PM

Nice writing...James

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

7 posted 2006-03-29 12:12 PM

Thanks James!!!

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

8 posted 2006-03-29 10:00 AM

i love it...
curiouse

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2006-03-29 10:55 AM

excellent writing.
Hugs,
Ethel

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

10 posted 2006-03-29 07:02 PM

Thanks.... I really glad everyone is enjoying this piece.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

11 posted 2006-03-30 12:38 PM

Add a little blue grass sound behind this and it will hit number one on the charts.
I hope you have more like this one.
Love this write.

JL

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

12 posted 2006-03-30 12:55 PM

This just pulls the reader in and keeps on giving....enjoyed the verse.......jo

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

13 posted 2006-03-30 08:10 AM

Well, JL I haven't written much lately but maybe some of my past poems will strike a tune for you. Your gonna just have to look. However, it brings me joy that have enjoyed this write...

Illana, I am also happy you found my write good.

Thanks Again to both of you....

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