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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ My man of many muses. You are the flutter of sleepy eyes and sheets of light filtering through the blinds. The quiet rhythm and routine I've grown accustom to. I think of you as a foreign tongue that I can't comprehend. Your voice drifts in and out of my dreams leaving me lucid. Like the restless sea moaning and motionless. In my slumber I built walls, then tore them down in my desire to be near you. Clinging like a heavy mist that lingers only to lift before our time. It is through those passages where I retreat and weep. Yet you remain, the title to my love song a melody without words floating down a steady stream, that takes me closer to the edge. Bending in a field of lavender and wildflowers, romancing the wreckless wind. But as human nature would have it we lost momentum along the way. I watched you parade across the room and light it up with sparks flying. An after thought that would be me, I turned away. I kept what was mine for the taking carving a place in my heart for you. My forever keepsake and moments to treasure. Oh, how you move me. As a piano player plays, I remember the way your hands reached out. With care, you hit the notes and held the keys sweeping me off my feet, above and beyond the constellation of stars. My darling heart, you play me like I've never been played. ~*~ |
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Kathy Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 153 |
Oh, my... My night just got warmer, Hugs, Kathy |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is a beautiful love poem, Lori!  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
such a well composed score -- how could he resist?  well played lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks for reading Kathy, glad to know it warmed you up a bit. Martie, your support and encouraging words mean so much. Thank you, always. Oh lookie here, what a nice surprise Reb. Thank you very much. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This.....simply a joy to read. Would be if I didn't know you, didn't care....but I do know, and that makes it so much more. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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openthoughts Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 94Where the child can be free |
Beautiful Heartwarming Breathtaking Many other words come to mind but very few of them can truly capture the essence of your poem |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ed, Thanks for your kind words, and for caring most of all. That was an awful nice reply openthoughts. Thank you so much for reading what I wrote. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, wow! How well you play the reader too so between the tears (everything beautiful makes me cry) I can only say another "Wow". Bluesy - you do well, gal! Don't go missing again.  Helen |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I kept what was mine for the taking carving a place in my heart for you. My forever keepsake and moments to treasure. Oh, how you move me." Perfect... but that last line is more than perfect! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
you do ooze such sensual music with this one makes me want to hear more of your music |
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smithdr Junior Member
since 2006-02-25
Posts 26 |
Love the ending! David |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
bluesygal, what a gorgeous flowing write! I think it's one of your best. Stick around a while, and offer us more notes, please? |
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shades of paul Member
since 2005-12-14
Posts 370In Reality |
A great write....................paul shades of peace,love,and happiness to you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Helen~ I know what you mean, I'm an emotional sort myself. Thank you so much for being here. Hello Lady~ I think the memories we make are quite possibly our greatest keepsakes. Thanks Dark Stranger~ They don't call me Bluezy for nothin', dontcha know!! Nice of you to stop by, thanks. Thank ya, David~ Aww Kacy~ You make me smile. Some more love notes you mean! I'm hopeless!!  Thanks so much.I appreciate that. Thank you, Paul~ |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
You really touched me with this one. Like I told Daark, everyone should have a lovesong...you and your piano man obviously compose your own! I loved this! ... and yes, such sweet sentiment makes me blink back tears. Wonderful poem! ~ Karen ~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Yet you remain, the title to my love song a melody without words floating down a steady stream, that takes me closer to the edge. Bending in a field of lavender and wildflowers, romancing the wreckless wind." Wow, Bluesy....you've outdone yourself with this beautiful piece! ....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so lovely... excellent work!!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Moves through you leaving a trail of warmth. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
sometimes being 'played' can be a good thing....  enjoyed much lori...And so it those we live with |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
In another forum... Oh never mind you are good. Thanks Lori. Again. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I've not been able to post for a bit, but what a treat to find this warm and lovely piece which so ably expresses our feelings at such moments. Well done! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"Yet you remain, the title to my love song a melody without words floating down a steady stream, that takes me closer to the edge. Bending in a field of lavender and wildflowers, romancing the wreckless wind." Yanno, this has always been my favorite kind of Bluesy write. I hope you know what I mean by that. Wistful, melancholy and phrased perfectly.Good to read you again Lori...  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Klassy Lassy~ Thank you for your sweet reply. iliana~ Thanks for the beautiful and the wow. I enjoy your visits. Hey suthern gal~ good to see you here. I know when I'm trying to get my thoughts down, I need to settle in and get comfortable if I want my poem to read the way I'd like it to. I'm so glad you enjoyed. Thank you for paying me such a high compliment. Susan~ What a beautiful reply, thank you muchly. Lauren~ You're right, but even being played takes patience and tolerance. Thank you sweetie~ Larry~ Thank you for your prayers and for always leaving a kind word for me ...You are an angel. kayjay~ Always good to hear from you. Thanks so much for reading. I hope you stick around awhile. Duncan~ You show up when I least expect it and always you leave me smiling. I like the word wistful, kind of like sunbeams? Thank you so much. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ahh gal, so pleased to find you here today hon. When I read the title, I immediately thought of Neil Diamond... as I read further, I couldn't contain my smile. This is a spectacular write Lori, absolutely love this. Hugs sweetie, and am keepin you in my thoughts always hon. HUGS seek the flame within yourself |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Ahhhh... I saw the title of a song I love and found a poem I love even more! Simply gorgeous this is, really. You really make me glad I stopped by here again Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is so beautiful that I have no words to add. |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
I absolutely loved this  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Donna~ Thank you very much for always reading me and leaving such warm replies. You're just too sweet!! Caroline~ Thank you for being so kind. vandana~ It's always nice to see you on the blue pages. Thanks~ icebox~ Coming from you, I shall take that and run with it. Thank you, Sir~ exhale~ I'm so glad, and I appreciate you taking the time to let me know. Thanks a bunch~ |
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