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Do You Still Go Dancing After Midnight?
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Do You Still Go Dancing After Midnight? |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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Some nights your memory won’t let me be, as if I know you are remembering little bits of scenes you saved like crumbs of life you put away to nibble when you’re alone and sleep denies your call, like the night I watched you dance right out of your shoes, then your hose, what little clothes had made it earlier out the door, every choice in turn as you moved silent languid mind awash in champagne and your own pheromones, as each shred of shy hit the floor I watched your fire climb from your toes to the knot that held your hair, until that too was freed to dance wild round your throat, all but your hat which as I recall you chose to wear like a crown for reasons I guessed then were much too intimate to share with simple useful trash like me. ©2006 by icebox |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
icebox The mind is like an icebox and some time when we forget to replenish it such things happen. Excellent write. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I'll bet she does still go dancing, somewhere. Stunning!  ...jo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
A beautiful dance which she spoiled by thinking that you are trash and by using you. - Owl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox That last part about the hat made me think of the Tom Jones song, "You Can Leave Your Hat On". |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"all but your hat which as I recall you chose to wear like a crown for reasons I guessed then were much too intimate to share with simple useful trash like me." An amazing piece of work icebox. Stopped me dead in my tracks. Thank you. |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
Oh My God!!! This just moved me... Thank you so much fro sharing. I love this!!!!!!!! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"to share with simple useful trash like me" this woman sees it this way...her trash is my treasure |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
WOW!!!!!!!!  I so love your poetry - you are an awesome writer. *slips icebox into the library*Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
one mans (lady) trash is another mans (Lady) treasure~ and you are surely a treasure, not trash~ My spirit will rise |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
beautifully done poem with visual, emotive descriptions that twist at the heart... |
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helenadepp Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 59durham, england |
This was really moving. Thankyou, you write beautifully. |
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