Open Poetry #37 |
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Modern Times |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada ![]() |
outlined in snow outlined in dirt feel the difference 6 feet under today is tomorrow and tomorrow is tomorrow is tomorrow there's never enough coffee there's never enough air there's never enough time count the seconds with your heartbeat closer and closer to existence till you fall off the edge who says the world isn't flat preach preach preach preach and then complain for the acclaim it's modern times Ace don't forget to ready aim fire or you might just miss the target right between the eyes Ace |
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FNG Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477 |
I like this.. 'there's never enough coffee there's never enough air there's never enough time count the seconds with your heartbeat closer and closer to existence till you fall off the edge who says the world isn't flat' says it all.. Enjoyed it. ![]() |
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ManOfWolves28 Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 83 |
Something catchy about this and Im not at all sure why. It's quite suiting to modern times which is probably why I prefer the premodern times best. Less chaos for one. I liked reading this. ...If you choose not to decide you still have made a choice. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I like this. The title is good too. Modern Times, next to The Great Dictator, is my favorite Charlie Chaplin film, lol. "6 feet under today is tomorrow and tomorrow is tomorrow is tomorrow" Very powerful tone in this piece and it is laced with truth. Well done indeed. Cheers - Ed "Give me a museum, and I'll fill it." |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
liked the edgy feel to this |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I enjoyed it very much. Good work. |
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