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openthoughts
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 94
Where the child can be free

0 posted 2006-02-14 11:19 PM

Call Me Cathy

Each pair resting high upon its pedestal
White wigged and determining
My sentence is undeserved
And yet they will not hear my plea
      For it shall never be made
Caring not for past
Or future.  Only now, on the surface
What can be judged on sight
And my search continues
     For signs of existence
And while I read them
Like harsh words on a blank page
They too search for signs
Of bitter truths to be found.  But no
      Only forged opinions remain
For now, I am content
To go hand in hand with one
Living in fabricated falsities
With my other around the throat
       Choking the will away
For the hands of beauty to
One pair of unknowing judge
Becomes the tentacles of
Undying evil to the other
       Heart to one, bed to another
With the woven tales
Cast over the jury
The second hand ticks
Closing it’s fingers tighter
       Tightening grip and shortening gasps
So dance my puppet
As I pull your strings
Unwitting servants to devotion
The court will not see this case
Not today for sure
       Nor ever

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2006-02-15 01:07 AM

This is some fascinating free verse. Leaves a person wanting to know the story behind it. In one of your first poems I thought you mentioned you were very young. You sure could have fooled me!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2006-02-15 02:59 PM

OpenToughts~
Nice ... very nice~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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openthoughts
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 94
Where the child can be free

3 posted 2006-02-15 03:43 PM

Thank you very much...just knowing my work has been read and appreciated means everything to me

Age has no authority in the world of poetry...

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2006-02-15 06:58 PM

  Hi;  my name is Cathy, also.  Having my name included in a title drew me in to read your poem.  I found in your poetry sadness, maybe bitterness.  Whatever situation you face, or the character of the poem faces, I hope the conflicts are resolved. Your shared thoughts of a painful situation have deeply touched me.

  I, also, relate to your poem on another level because I am a Libra.  Libras tend to weigh things over and over again, countless times, many times appearing to achieve little movement.  It is very fatiguing and frustrating.  As a Libra, I don't like making the slightest call, but sometimes, just have to.  I would not envy anyone in a situation whose job causes harm or hurt to another person's being, nor would I want to be judged.

   My heartfelt wishes for happier days,

miscellanea (cathy)

    Your poem was awesomely written.

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (02-16-2006 07:22 AM).]

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-02-16 04:46 PM

"So dance my puppet
As I pull your strings
Unwitting servants to devotion
The court will not see this case
Not today for sure
Nor ever"

"Age has no authority in the world of poetry..." Agreed, yet I feel as Jo does... this is amazing work and even more so for a young person. Nicely done!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2006-02-19 07:10 PM

I shall have to look for your initial post,
Openthoughts, as this one is a heart-breaker,
to be sure. Contained anger, open angst,
still, a controlled decisive pen, indeed.

As Misc'e stated...and I haven't use this
word in a long time...awesome!

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2006-02-19 08:36 PM

Yes, I too agree..this is awesomely written
with a great deal of feeling pouring forth.

desert-spike
Member

since 2006-02-01

Posts 194
TX/USA

8 posted 2006-02-21 01:30 PM

That is incredidible, crafty, and painfully true.

Nice one

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

9 posted 2006-02-21 01:48 PM

This left me begging for relief--either forgiveness or acceptance. Well written and extremely gripping.

Shenachie

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2006-02-21 09:52 PM

I felt frustration and pain, and sadly, acceptance of a situation beyond your immediate control.
But your heart and mind control your pen, and from this alone, I see you will come out the winner in this battle.
and what a profound truth, in this reply:

"Age has no authority in the world of poetry"

no matter the age, your pen yields a mighty voice!

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