Open Poetry #37 |
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Back Burner |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989![]() |
You place me there, on the back burner along with all of the other things that you can "get to later" or, even are less important to you than this hurryupandwait schedule that you abuse and, yeah I know that someday when you're bored, you'll finally look until you can find all of those things that you took and carelessly tossed aside; forgotten items placed there to reside until one day when you realize that you forgot to turn the burner down and before we had a chance to simmer you burned our love to the ground and left nothing more than this scorched love remembered only in charred remains of yesterday. I like the price you pay to keep passion on solid ground.... if it ain't about thunder and lightning it just ain't worthwhile oh no, it just ain't my style....{Toby Keith} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (02-17-2006 02:44 PM).] |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"and, yeah I know that someday when you're bored, you'll finally look until you can find all of those things that you took and carelessly tossed aside;" Sad, sad, sad... However, very well written. JL ![]() |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Aching and angry on your behalf. This is very sad, but so well-penned (as always!). - Owl |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hurryupandwait schedule that you abuse made me ~smile~ for personal reasons nicely done ![]() M |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ouch! ![]() ![]() |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"that you forgot to turn the burner down and before we had a chance to simmer you burned our love to the ground" Nicely done Gentle Spirit! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW! great write - enjoyed! ~hugs~ ![]() Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this deserved another read... ![]() M |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
This is wonderful, Gentle Spirit. However, I put things on the back burner because I need to clear the way to give them my full attention! Just a thought. I do not disagree with your theme. I would just want to avoid getting burned. Thought provoking poem as you can well see. Loved it! Shenachie |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
awesome read and write... |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well said Donna ... well said. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Great write, Donna. *hugs*.....jo |
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