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too far away.... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 a moment quiet reprieve time to be still to dream to believe in silent hush this brush of dawning waking slow with stretch and yawning still held in pause of here and there whispering sigh ....I still feel you everywhere.... Interruption alarm clock ringing (where’s my coffee?) day has started birds are singing in solitary I will review rewind refeel the touch of you to soothe me through the day when I’m reminded you’re too far too damn far away..... ~SEA~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this would make a marvelous song, especially loved the way this reminded me of me...holding on so much so, and what we tell ourselves....ohhhh Lordy, just to believe it isn't so.... Hugs to you...with wishes that he will come to his lady and reveal he to feels the same... Hugs |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
from the other side of a slender thought hair's width thickness seperating dreams and undreamed enjoyed this lady ms suesea |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Wonderful expressed emotional feelings , I know someone thats too damn far away too , by the way Steve Hanks paintings always portray emotions execellently Hope |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Susan..this has to be your best yet.. Amazing write..love the short lines, the slight touch of ache, yes...excellent!! Hugs to you lovely lady~ Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I agree with Nancy Susan! This indeed is my favorite of yours! I refuse to make plans past this moment in time.... |
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Magician Member
since 2002-08-14
Posts 126 |
Very nice...I'm glad I caught this one. It leapt off the page. |
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JesusChristPose Senior Member
since 2005-06-21
Posts 777Pittsburgh, Pa |
You put your thoughts... your emotions... into words, words expressing your feelings so easily seen. Enjoyed! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is a most beautifully bittersweet write, dearest friend, I bet it can indeed feel sad often when we miss that physical touch of one we love sooooooo much, but the spirit of that love always is there, and indeed you can be refelt with it! (angel friendship hugs) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I feel this way alot...I really miss someone when they are gone...even if for a short time...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The nicest part about missing someone is how glad you are when you see them again right? I love Steve Hanks art, it truly speaks, and especially with this piece. Nice going Susan. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this muse is tattooed on your heart.  you are the queen of angsty ache groovy girl.  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Now I got Carole King on my mind, Susan. It melts right off the page onto my desk, pooling at my feet . . . |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ Always ... in all ways ... you *gift* us with beautiful poetic thoughts~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
oh yes...this reached out and touched me. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
This... flies... |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Understanding this... this is awesome.. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I know the ache of someone being too far away...hugss you luv ya In your light I learn how to love |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
I'm never disappointed reading you, SEA... This is beautiful... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
I agree with everyone above...this is beautiful. :-) |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
And, I also agree, Sea. Your poetry is always beautiful. Hugs, Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I came back to this because it accurately describes my mood: you’re too far too damn far away..... Susan . . . |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
You just keep doing it over and over. Writing stuff I really, really like. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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SoundWaves Member
since 2005-06-22
Posts 113Center Stage |
Wow! Susan, That was great!  The spotlight can only get brighter. |
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pictureme2 Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 194 |
SEA This left me breathless! Standing ovation! pictureme2 |
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