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The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

0 posted 2006-01-03 09:52 PM

For serenity blaze who let me borrow her title
"fragrance that she left behind"

what do you mean
do I remember what I said
I said
somebody
please
get her outta here!
she’s ‘bout to drive me crazy
never shuts up
ain’t got a kind word to say
got her fork in my plate
hand in my pocket
mouth in some other ear
then she rocks and moans
‘bout how she
can’t believe she treated me that way
there is nothing more evil than a woman
that don’t really love you
and still wants to mess with you

I remember exactly what I said
but that was before
I smelled the
fragrance that she left behind

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

1 posted 2006-01-03 11:58 PM

Oh how we all know people like this..Good work

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

2 posted 2006-01-04 02:48 AM

cool writing , welcome to pip too
hope the right one finds you
peace-

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

3 posted 2006-01-04 02:50 AM

Enjoyed this very much.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2006-01-04 05:05 PM

so true:

there is nothing more evil than a woman
that don’t really love you
and still wants to mess with you

and then the afterthought . . .

I betcha Serenity doesn't know this is here, she would have come and seen.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2006-01-04 11:08 PM

Thank you all.

PS I will let her know.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2006-01-05 09:27 AM

I'm smiling.

(I'm sorry I'm late.)

But I love what you did with this, you didn't take an easy turn with it, and I do enjoy the unexpected. (um, within reason, folks)

I was having some problems, though, recalling what poem you originally drew the title from, then someone helpfully bumped it, and at the end of it I credit Christopher, so actually, "the fragrance she left behind" may come from my lifting it from HIM.

I dunno. I just type the stuff.

But you, dear Lady, can write.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

7 posted 2006-01-05 06:38 PM

Oh my. Now I don't know what to say.

Thank you for the title (wherever it came from) and the compliment.

I consider YOU the poet.

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