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Bodger
Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260
Tolerance for a short time

0 posted 2005-12-27 02:02 PM


I was washed at the night of nations
I shed and shred my coat
And became human
I on that night assumed my beliefs
That words meant more to
Something

I drank at your nation
And I have drunk at many
All that we become and became
What do you ask of me and my reliefs
That words are not controlled
Abused

I dream of woman who fly who control
I dream of dreams
I dream

When rape victims where reduced to the Scroll Tag I fought for them to have they're as 'Sir Dave of Tag'

My life has to changed and take the words

And with regret

I take my words

I take my words

Dave



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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-12-27 03:50 PM


"My life has to changed and take the words"

I'm uncertain about the meaning there--as I am not sure if it is written as intended or if the past tense of "changed" was a slip of the fingers, or was the word "to" an accidental addition?

It rather confused me, I'm afraid.

but this--

"And with regret

I take my words

I take my words"


I understood on a personal level, as I too, have often read my own words, and eaten them like a medicine I know will make me feel worse before I feel better...

I'm not sure if that is your intent, but oh I do tend to apply all I read to my life.

Enjoyed the think, tho. I can appreciate the undertone of determination.


Jeep Monkey
Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 96
Chaos
2 posted 2005-12-27 06:30 PM


Politically driven
What's meant is not meant
Phonetically rid them
Lots spent but not spent

I have waited to read a write of yours since I've noticed your most gracious and guiding replies.  I was not let down.  Your written creativity flies.

JM


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