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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Cirrus rose wide eyed, as a child, I stood wanting to reach my hand ~ dive into its fleece, melt within the embrace of this . . . Hemingway saw these things. Scratching bloodink on his Royal Deluxe. He must have fought sublimation to capture still life photos of the dead walking alive swallowing them whole spitting them onto clean white sheets of linen later to be pressed and lain volumes of beauty side by side as soldiers marching an Army of misery. [This message has been edited by littlewing (12-15-2005 12:27 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
littlewing Its not a walk in the park.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
He must have sensed utter beauty to capture still life photos of the dead walking alive swallowing them whole then spitting them onto clean white sheets of linen later to be pressed and lain volumes of pain side by side soldiers gawd, gal this gave me shivers... very well done Suzie, you have this spectacular way of putting vision into words... seek the flame within yourself |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
have to say, you're on fire lately. not to say the talent hasn't always been there cause you know i l#ve youre writes. but lateley alot more focus and drive to your words. awesome |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"wanting to reach my hand ~ dive into its fleece, melt within the embrace of this . . ." fantastic!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling at sy's reply... and you KNOW I have a Hemingway fixation too. so this: "He must have fought sublimation" root word, sublimate: 1.Chemistry. To cause (a solid or gas) to change state without becoming a liquid. 2.To modify the natural expression of (a primitive, instinctual impulse) in a socially acceptable manner. To divert the energy associated with (an unacceptable impulse or drive) into a personally and socially acceptable activity. v. intr. Chemistry To transform directly from the solid to the gaseous state or from the gaseous to the solid state without becoming a liquid. Considering his appetite for liquids (and my own) I found the implications of this'n intriguingly fun. I nod, too, thinking of prolly way too many variables. sublimation...I think not.  I love you susie q.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
What Raph said Susie....I feel it too. Magnificent lil one  how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"swallowing them whole spitting them onto clean white sheets of linen later to be pressed and lain volumes of beauty side by side as soldiers marching an Army of misery" Oh, the visual....a true artist of words you are. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
First of all you guys are way too good to me. aww Sy, I know and it wasn't there either. right back to you Thank you Donna, I like that - what you said, I love imagery. Thanks Raph, that was really nice to say. I have had a lot of really good teachers, you know? *smile* That made me feel good. (can't you see I edited it like 5 times) *laughing* Gettin' picky in me old age. Susan - *smile* I knew you would like that part and hey, that is by you, ya know! Thank you. Karen, how odd (not really) that you pick that one word out because *laughing here* I went to the dictionary and looked that up like 3 times to make sure I was using it in the correct form, for what it needs to mean and still was not sure if I should have used it or not. Thank you, I love you too. Thank you Maree - you are so sweet to me. I truly appreciate that. Susan? You are much too kind, but thank you. Thanks guys, I have a Hemingway thing too. And its the way he wrote, simple but astounding, straight forward yet poetic and like Kerouac, I see him as a tortured soul who must have seen so much beauty in life, he became bored eventually, it killed his spirit ~ this world and being a true writer -without his words . . . he was already dead to himself. If I could send each of you one Hemingway - it would have to be "The Old Man and the Sea." I know, hard choices - but THAT - man, that just . . . One day, maybe would like to see Sun Valley. all around |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
well when it comes to imagery gal, you are a true master of it. Yes, Hemingway was a master.... check your e Suzie. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
EH, is one of my favorite writers. And thus, you must know by now that you are too. Great poem! coyote 8) (Have you ever read his poems?) "If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it." |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Donna? Something is up with my servers, I have NO email and I emailed you from here, did you get that? Hey coyote . . . thank you soo much and actually, no, I have never read his poetry. Shame on me. Thanks for pointing me that way. Thanks guys. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Got it Suzie, and just replied so, well that explains that...lmao... thanks... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I know two Sun Valley's and still cannot write in grit the way he did what a coool write, susieQ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I understand what broke Hemingways heart, was when he lost his ability to reason and write...James |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
2 Sun Valleys . . really? Gosh, Kacy you have been everywhere . . . thank you for that. James? That is what I understand too . . . thank you for seeing that. Thanks guys. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
later to be pressed and lain volumes of beauty side by side ahh yes old man hemsy i have sat in his seat or his bar stool i use to work at a bar in town here where he was a regular , 2nd stool from the end ...for real , and whenever i could when i got out of work i would be found sitting there having one or 2 for the man .,i live in a town on little traverse bay in a town famous for its fossil stones ,lol he would spend some of his summers in the area ... lwing this was a charged beauty, your back in action i like it ...(((Hugs))) ~wolfy  howllls |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
You mean all this time I could have been visiting his haunts and where you are is a drop kick from me? *smile* Thank you James, man, good for you - to be able to be where you are. Gosh, I am jealous! *smile* [This message has been edited by littlewing (12-16-2005 11:54 AM).] |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
lol little you always make me smile your welcome to stop by anytime , i would love to take you on a tour of the area ... hugs always ~James wolfie |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I've just heard you reading this on my answering machine, so it was easy to read your inflection and phrasings Wonderful! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you James . . . it makes me feel good that I could make somebody smile. Hiya Eddie . . . *smile* I am glad it came through ok . . . this time I wasn't singing. *cringe* Oh the joys you endure . . . Thank you Thanks guys . . . |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wow. Papa saw the Idaho sun and the light within the souls of others. Yet the light within his own soul always was just beyond the rim of his horizon. I remember when he died. I couldn't fault the simplicity of his choice but a cold rage at life stayed with me a long time. In many times and places in my life by chance I have been where he was and thought of him. Thanks for writing this poem! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
started a movable feast last week...funny you wrote this.....you have a way of paying homage to the greats , but in your own unique style, not just as a review of their work, but as its own entity, if you know what i mean.......hey......im kind of literature wise a bit challenged still, should read a lot more than i have, guilty of being a classic cliffnotes reader back in the day.....but you make us reach, truly do.... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
"wanting to reach my hand dive into its fleece, melt within the embrace of this" WOW oh WOW you're stunning  |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
captivating, my dear~ ~babygirL **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I have to admit that I haven't read any of Hemingway's books, but this poem makes me want to - but then your poetic magic is so great that perhaps I would be disappointed. I doubt if I would get such pleasure out of every word, as I do out of your art. - Owl |
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