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Ace33
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since 2005-12-09
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0 posted 2005-12-13 07:17 AM


I'm trying to change back to the way it was when you met me//

I thought i was over you but not completely//

In the beginning it was all good//

to make you happy i did whatever i could//

now a days all we do is argue//

i don't call anymore because i don't want to bother you//

and when i see you i never speak//

because i don't want you to notice how you make me weak//

as i stand on my feel i do not beg and plead//

it's up to you to realize i'm what you need//


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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
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1 posted 2005-12-13 07:37 AM


"because i don't want you to notice how you make me weak"

Great line.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2005-12-13 06:58 PM


Ace, welcome to Pips! Ditto Susan's choice of fine line picks.
Nicely written, poignant.  

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
3 posted 2005-12-14 07:43 PM


This poem makes me feal a wee bit blue.

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
4 posted 2005-12-15 03:04 PM


Strange, but I feel a connection to your words somehow....

enjoyed your thoughts, thanks for sharing them~

~ARH

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