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Friday, the 13th Horror
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Friday, the 13th Horror |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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Friday the 13th Horror To JB 13 May 2005 Tonight shock peeled back strips of your veneered normality revealing momentary psychotic mindrat flashes that I could have missed but didn’t and the vengeance in your snarl which you covered badly with a joke chilled my skeleton for hours after you had gone. - Owl |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Sometimes you think you know a person very well, and than there is an instance they react to with "psychotic mindrat flashes" and their "veneer" wears thin, exposing a personality that could be violent... Apparently this happened to you.. Your poem is a well done senario of that sort of thing happening, at least in my mind. __________ice ><> |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
know this feeling, seen it a few times, yes you can think you know someone, then bam, somethings not right. but it could be you and not them, communication is so very important. knowing hurts and scars, sometimes something said brings out the bad, just as it could the good, and it left unhealed, emotions just come pouring out. i can understand both sides. i have seen it, felt it. lived with it. nice write. My spirit will rise |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gosh, the thing is I know exactly what you mean by this, I have SEEN it: psychotic mindrat flashes love that line btw |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
Short but powerful. Enjoyed it. Great write. lots of luck, bgj  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Whew! Yes, certainly powerful and extremely well expressed. I hope it wasn't "a dark night" when this occurred.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Not one of your better moments, I can see! Gosh, your chilling words just made me relive one of my own! Brrr! Scary!!! Warm hug to take the chill out! EA |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
OH MY. you just described a sight i never thought could be described. Too many lines to quote, just....wow. Another one of yours, into my library. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
eerily familiar so sorry you've seen this scene peelbacks are scary even when you are prepped for them |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you ice, McGroves, littlewing, bgi, Honeybunch, Earth Angel, gemjop and Midnitesun for your warm replies. I had seen the mindrat flashes a few times before, so the surprise was more his showing them, rather than their existence. Honeybunch, it probably was a dark night, but the flashes were just as he was leaving and on the other side of my security gate! I’m sorry you had a similar experience, Earth Angel. Thanks gemjop. It was so creepy that the words just flowed. I have written him a hate poem (a few years ago I think), but I would be very nervous to post it here as everyone seems to think I am so sweet and nice. Perhaps I had better post it to put the record straight. However, although the hate poem is vitriolic, the person who inspired it, inspired it. Thanks Midnitesun for your concern. However, I am glad I had the experience. I have backed off from him before (actually many times, LOL! – he sounds important to me, but actually he isn’t – he was a long time ago, but not now) and I sorta forget how bad things are until I am reminded. I don’t think he will ever want to darken my door again, so that is a good thing. - Owl |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
post it...vitriole can be positive  the 'flames' it contains just might help burn his urges out of existence |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I did. It's called "The Parting Gift". I love your little red devil smiley! - Owl |
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