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silverwind Junior Member
since 2005-12-07
Posts 37that place over there |
He sat alone in the mist blinking away his tears, his thoughts turning evermore to those wasted, wasted years. Pain stabbing at a body so thin causing a cry to escape fom him he hunched lonely against the cold, at just nineteen years he felt so old. If only he'd listened, taken the advice, heeded the people that were being nice. He reached out a hand as if to touch the people he needed now so much. Ghost's in the mist are all he will find, figments of a drug fuelled mind. " I love you Dad, I love you Mum. " He weakly cried, and then the drugs took over, and alone, he died. silverwind |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
deeeeepressing. but well done. you rhyme arbitrarily but sho a good instinct for which lines you should connect. -majnu |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A real heart-breaker of a poem. Drugs destroy the mind, the spirit, and the body. Drugs kill. Love & Light, Earth Angel |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
silverwind, This is one of the most touching poems I've read for a long, long time. Why one can be lonely with so much love around, I'll never know, but I know it is so. Nineteen was a very difficult age for me,too. I'm hoping this is fictional, but I realize that it could be quite real. miscellanea |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Sad and lonley.A horrid way to have to go. best to you . martyjo |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Randall, this is soooooooo heartbreaking and indeed a central problem that so many youth are enduring today, dearest friend! (sad sigh) I applaud you for speaking out on this issue and encouraging loved ones to guide our children with care and encourage them to say "NO!" God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Randall, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
this breaks my heart, yes drugs destroy. My spirit will rise |
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pictureme2 Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 194 |
Drug addiction is an illness of our times! Drugs destroy and drugs do and can kill! What a very sad read! pictureme2 |
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silverwind Junior Member
since 2005-12-07
Posts 37that place over there |
A big warm thankyou to everyone that took the time to read my work and also for taking the time to reply. Yes, it is a very sad subject but one that should not be brushed under the carpet or regarded as an embarrassment by the ' powers that be ' silverwind |
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