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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-12-05 09:53 AM



winter wears her long shirt dawn
in white wool she could be
the trees at a mountain hem

but she is the ice song
that strums from teuton's mouths
perhaps the vikings know her northerns

they are there in long ships at the bay
they are children's corks floating
but they wear their wooden shields

like rows of unbuttoned eyes
that search the morrow's morning
to know the hollow of her ribs

when she is odinary in her chanting

____________

daark

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-12-05 10:09 AM


You do evoke the loveliest reveries for me.

I love when you write like this, DS.

Methinks you hide your tenders deep, and I confess, I find that intriguing.

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2005-12-05 10:25 AM


serene one..
intrigue is such a lovely word when
you suggest it....

there was/is a tender depth
that only needs one to touch it
to have it become visible
thank you for the whisper



Sunshine
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3 posted 2005-12-05 01:41 PM



One has to read carefully
and understand with sensitivity
that you really never misspell anything...

cante away...

.

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2005-12-05 01:54 PM


ms sunshine
odinarily not
(grin)
thanks lady friend

OwlSA
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5 posted 2005-12-06 04:28 PM


and her chants are of long, slow-remembering warmth . . .

- Owl

Midnitesun
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6 posted 2005-12-06 05:24 PM


loved the 'unbottoned eyes' reference
a powerfully good write, DS
make no mistake about it,
you are a mighty fine dreamer

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