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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-12-02 08:34 PM

It was the second time
we reconnected,
when the leaves
no longer held
the mirror
to the sky's reflection,
and i treaded gently
through your demons,
knowing once
that i had bruised you,
with my marked obsession
to shake your steadfast waters,
and beg the waves explosion
just enough to rock your stoic shoreline,
and let the passing winds come sweep you
through all my magic places,
where the timid ones like you
had feared to venture,

and on the second time
we reconnected,
what my heart hid
would be paraded,
in the symbiosos of all seasons,
where the falling leaves'
interpretations
are on the eyes of viewer,
as to whether they abandon,
or are tossed like orphans
by their keeper,

and amid confusion
and striking realization
on the second time
we reconnected,

i came to face
the blatant truth,
of this thing
with me and you,
having just as much the validation,
as opposing versions
of the falling leaves'
interpretations.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-03-2005 05:57 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-12-02 08:47 PM

Michele...talk about Chemistry!

DANG

I'm surprised this page
hasn't exploded!

Oh, by the way?

Can you tell?

Excellent!

So much so, IWIHWT....

Thank you for the library keeper!

"There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

2 posted 2005-12-03 05:45 AM

awesome

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2005-12-03 11:34 AM

Don't know why this is down the page with only two replies when it deserves so much more...

Michele, this one touched me because it made me think of things I hid..even from myself..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

4 posted 2005-12-03 03:50 PM

Excellent read!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-12-03 03:51 PM

WOW!!! Michele...an amazing write!!
Hugs YOU!

~Let peace begin with me...

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2005-12-03 04:17 PM

Wonderfully done. The woprds explode off the page in a storm of autumn leaves rising up and fluttering down to create a cacophony of sight, sound and emotion. Brilliant!

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

7 posted 2005-12-03 07:02 PM

I never see how such phrasing comes to be,
But it does in the minds of good writers.

Great tale of a storm-tossed pairing. Ken

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-12-04 12:04 PM

Ahhh Mich...just magic!

m xx

how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more
~Neruda~

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

9 posted 2005-12-04 04:07 AM

and between these lines lie a realization, perhaps? Like the changing of seasons even.

Michele, this is so superbly written, I am truly in awe.

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

10 posted 2005-12-04 09:32 AM

I believe that Sue has hit the nail on the head...

"and between these lines lie a realization, perhaps?"

Perhaps the realization that there is a conflict of personalities in the union that cannot be overcome..

Karilea mentioned "chemistry", the poem is filled with it...like a magic gunpowder that explodes, over and over again..

I am betting on a third reconnection...

enjoyed
___________ice
><>

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

11 posted 2005-12-04 01:04 PM

Truly one of your most uncompromising pieces Michelle...Passionate and pure.
TD

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

12 posted 2005-12-06 04:20 PM

Beautiful in the tremors of its sadness.

- Owl

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2005-12-06 05:53 PM

Enjoyed...James

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

14 posted 2005-12-06 06:15 PM

thanks for your feedback and insight into my world

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

15 posted 2005-12-17 10:12 PM

WOW Michelle. Awesome write.

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