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A Secret That Remains
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A Secret That Remains |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
It was said that When the injection was given That aging would cease.. That the receiver would never die- In part, it was true, but after the shot Their body stayed still, a few Moments stopped, in limbo. Its then their white hair began To darken-but nature insisted They stay its ancient way, dismissing Wishes, that things remain the same. To the patients delight, Movement towards death had stopped But to everyone's surprise It reversed direction, moving them back -wards towards the time of their birth. They then began arriving before asking "How long until we get there?" Traveling through time already spent, Past lingering on incidents of uglyness, Traveling backwards Pausing momentarily on lovely Station stops that briskly fleeted, Just like when long time gone events Took place... seemingly the same, They passed ... far too hastily. Stopping to distress on love gone, The ignorance of begged forgiveness, Led to reason for strife, Then choices taken-quick refrains their song- The heat of bliss, first erotic kisses And then the chemical response When love first enters into brains Through the line of sight of eyes. The spiral, once it began to twist Became tornadic...Could not be reversed. Virginity revived, past this Came puberty, and all its pain- To childhood laughter-potty training; Calming turned into crying, Recognizing mother through the haze- On to first discovery of That in their world there was another Heartbeat other than their own- Pounding, sending sound Into a sea of amniotic; Not knowing, were it they were born (And there remained) That they would surely drown. In moisture and heat, an egg divides An intruder spews flagella, Contractions in a cave Penetration And then the patient disappears. Where they went from there, Is a secret that remains. [This message has been edited by ice (12-02-2005 04:27 AM).] |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow !!! Travel through time...and then some. Awesome write. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
~iceman , wow this blew my mind , thanks what a journey ... sweet idea too ~wolfman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford What a very interesting read...It must have been fun to write, as well. Much enjoyed where you took this!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 I loved this return-to-the-womb and then some trip!In both directions the spiraling speed seems to be like an out-of-control football, with an end zone beyond our imagination's playing field. See what you made me do? I don't even watch football, yet here I am relating something to a football! LOL |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Library clicked! You always awe me, Ice! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there is no way to describe the enthusiasum reading your poetry brings to my soul...I'm mezmorized by your ability to describe and relate, nature to the cosmic...intellect still growing, always questioning without questions, it just kinda comes to you, yanno. I believe your able to put yourself in the same place that I do...and it's marvelous isn't it? A marvelous learning session...of awarness, as it was, back then, knowing, without knowing. You do remember, don't you? Excellent read my friend. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good tailspin over the possibility of getting what one asks for, to return to their youth... in this day and age... one wonders that this fantasy couldn't very well become fact... Excellent read, ice! . |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
ice...Great writing my friend. Each line carries the reader to the next in anticapation until the last " Where they went from there is a secret that remains" Did I say great writing? YES I DID...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A very intriquing write Ice. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ford..this is totally mesmerizing, captivating..and so well written! Has to be one of your best! And a keeper indeed. These thoughts shall remain with me throughout the day.. I love when that magic happens. Hugs~Nancy ~Let peace begin with me... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Bravo! Ice, I commend you on your brilliance and creativity! A thoroughly engaging trip to the inception of one's time on Earth. A quantum leap backwards in time! Seeing life's journey in reverse was quite the mind trip! Love & Light, Linda |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
wow, again I am in awe of the genius and creativity that is written through your words your words are always a treat to these sometimes tired eyes. very well done, sir! |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
This was quite the trip, thank you, ice, rushing backwards through time, as if viewing a speeded-up film... But, my mind caught up in this, carried the momentum past the final lines...and continued backward in time...through the generations...through the Eras of Time, to the early Archaean, just before the first living cell was formed... Stopped there. CG |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Loved this one Ice - thought provoking |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes thought provoking. good one My spirit will rise |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Such wonderful replies deserve individual response..But because of limited computer time, I sometimes choose to spend it replying to other poetry on this site.. This does not mean that each reply is not read, and individually embraced.. I love and linger on each... And for each send thanks... ----------------ice ><> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 I am speechless and you are a master. I am keeping this.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kinda like the eye of a hurricane... this reminds me of a dream I had once, so long ago, I'd forgotten it. thank you Ford  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ford~ I can't even begin to recall just how many times I've had this very thought .... don't know why I never poeticized it ... and now I'm aware that I was waiting .... wanting .... for someone to do it as beautifully as you've done~ Thank you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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pictureme2 Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 194 |
Very creatively written! Falling back in time all the way thru....ends/begins and leaves me bewildered! Nicely done! Impressive! pictureme2 |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Awesome!! another for my library. m xx how i would love you, love you as no one ever did! Die and still, love you more. And still love you more..and more |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
ice, I had to go looking for this masterly and imaginative piece of writing and wasn't disappointed. But, no thanks, I don't want to go back the physical way! Been there, done that, and the t-shirt is wearing thin! I did, however, thoroughly enjoy your verbal trip - thanks.Helen |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
whoa! complete and total regression . . . fine writing indeed. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
It is no secret I love equal, all replies For each am grateful Though each may seem different Each marks the heart as special ----------ice ><> |
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