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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-12-01 01:22 AM



For awhile
Though it’s cold outside
There is a field of alfalfa
Below the upper floor
Of an old red barn

Through an open door
Sunlight
Is pouring in
As if to see

A woman
Two kittens
With wide blue eyes

Discovering the world
And being
In love


© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-12-01 12:26 PM


This is beautiful.

Since you've been so patient with me, I thought I'd ask about your choice of title. (I learn the most interesting things by just asking...)

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2 posted 2005-12-01 12:36 PM


amazingly profound...didn't want it to end
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3 posted 2005-12-01 12:51 PM


John~
Your title drew me into the depths of this piece~

I simply was reminded of an old Ben Franklin tale about the whistle that cost too much~
Don't know the story flashed me, but it did~

Thanks for sharing~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


Copied from Stories About Ben Franklin -

This morning I am going to tell you a
story about a little boy and a whistle.  The little boy in the story is
named Ben.  His full name was Benjamin Franklin.  Benjamin Franklin later
grew up to be one of the wisest men our world has ever known, but in our
story today, he was a little boy who did something very foolish.

When Ben was seven years old some of his friends gave him some money.  It
was quite a bit of money for a small boy. As Ben told it, "They filled my
pockets with coppers".  That is what they used to call pennies. With his
pockets full of money, Ben headed straight for a store where they sold
toys.  On the way to the store, he met a boy who had a whistle.  Perhaps it
was a whistle like this one that I have with me this morning.  When Ben
heard the whistle, he liked the sound of it so much that he told the boy he
would give him all of the money he had in his pockets if he would give him
the whistle.  The boy gave Ben the whistle and took the money.

Ben headed for home and when he got there, he went all around the house
playing his whistle.  His brothers, sisters, and cousins asked Ben where he
got the whistle and he told them that he had bought it with the money he
had been given.  They all started to laugh at Ben and make fun of him.
They told him that he had paid four times as much as the whistle was worth.
Ben was so hurt and felt so foolish that he began to cry, but he learned a
lesson that day that he would remember for the rest of his life.  From then
on, whenever he saw someone who had made a foolish choice in life, he would
say, "That man paid too much for his whistle."

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email -       noles1@totcon.com       

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2005-12-01 12:54 PM


Thank you Margie!

I can much better appreciate the poem now.   And thanks to you too, John.

This is a message I needed to hear at this particular time.

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5 posted 2005-12-01 12:58 PM


Wonderful write here John..
and thank you also to Marge.
Hugs~Nancy

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6 posted 2005-12-01 01:27 PM


A keeper this is John. Thankyou.
And thankyou Marge for the story.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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7 posted 2005-12-01 01:32 PM


I really liked this one
greatness, short and sweet
and the "That man paid too much for his whistle" story was too cool
~wolfman
  

Martie
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8 posted 2005-12-01 01:47 PM


John

I appreciate the way you write....and I'd like to learn how to say so much with fewer words.  !

Huan Yi
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9 posted 2005-12-03 12:24 PM




SB,

Decades ago, I purchased “The Chieftains 3” on LP,
(it’s been reissued on CD now).  On it are two airs:

Eibhli Gheal Chiuin Ni Chearbhaill

and

An Ghaoth Aneas.

They’ve always associated, to me,  with a
particular era in my life.  If I write something,
and when then reading it find myself humming
one or both of those melodies, I know I’ve succeeded
in, for me at least, evoking the mood of that time.

Thanks everyone for reading.

John


Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2005-12-03 11:16 AM


Hey John not only did I love this but also your story in your response.   Recreaction can be so comforting..for me it's smell...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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11 posted 2007-04-20 10:35 PM


oh!!!!!!
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