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ecrivan
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my own state

0 posted 2005-11-22 09:02 PM


A pat on the back
insults break into poems
complements into credits
need becomes appreciation
search for a stimulating space

You're a great guy
got your stuff together
unlike most people
get together for a coffee
not to get you depressed

Got to get onto life
too easy to spend money
a word of encouragement
always paid in full
appreciation falls short
stimulating space is crowded

Time to move on
talk about right places
get on with life
not getting anywhere here
rambling on
finish unfinished business
onto a stimulating room.



[This message has been edited by ecrivan (11-24-2005 12:56 AM).]

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1 posted 2005-11-30 12:37 PM


Many astute observations here... *S*
LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-11-30 03:06 PM


we are the tenants of suppose in circumstance
if we fail to realize our fortunes in higher ideas


incredible write....

Kethry
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3 posted 2005-11-30 03:09 PM


This sounds like a party conversation. The nice thing about parties is you can move from topic to topic and always be a part of whatever conversation is taking place. This has the same elements of conversation overheard but it also gave me food for thought.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



ecrivan
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my own state
4 posted 2005-12-01 01:10 AM


one can take this as exemplifying victims of circumstance, tenants of the space we occupy, borders of party talk rooms and sharers of hand me down scenarios...its all good


iliana
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5 posted 2005-12-01 01:23 AM


Know what you mean....at times, have felt like this. Pretty much describes many scenarios very well.   ....jo
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
6 posted 2005-12-01 01:35 AM


ah, missed reading your insights
peppermint35
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7 posted 2005-12-01 10:39 AM


as long as you keep moving, you can spread the wisdom too.. yes? .. or so I believe

Enjoyed sharing yours

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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