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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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what did you save from the dark your lips whispered the sounds and I read the poems in your eyes you were taller in white but the dark colors were secrets that made you pedestal perfect the spirits were an audience behind clapping invisible hands on que like snapshot dancers of light and you said their tattoos were warm on your skin some mornings when the early songs came and they opened your mind's windows __________ daark |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
it is from the darkness, when we enter without fear, we find the tattoos of even song slightly touching our faces, with warmth and you've described her so perfectly, in understanding in an almost acceptance for her success, her growth, and that you admire most dearly... wonderful morning read! |
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JungelPrints New Member
since 2005-11-07
Posts 1 |
Beautiful... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"the spirits were an audience behind clapping invisible hands on que like snapshot dancers of light" I love how you do that.... this is fantastic  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS "I read the poems in your eyes" I love that!!  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes, they are there, aren't they? No better place to read them than in the eyes of the one in whom they live. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Yogi Member
since 2001-11-05
Posts 68 |
Awsome Write |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Very beautiful. I loved every word as well as the mist clothing your poem and the ambiance you created. There is a typing/spelling error in the third stanza. I am sure you meant “cue”. Personally I would have made the second line in the third stanza: “invisible hands, clapping on cue”, although it interrupts the metre a little. I like the effect of the title reversed in the final line. It reminds me of a poem of mine, called Moon Patterns. Thank you for the pleasure of reading your poem. - Owl |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Mr. D, you always write it with perfection... just enough to get us going and too little to get us there... I always enjoy. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Sorry, came back to add this to my library. I don't know how to do it without being in a reply. - Owl |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
i have missed your whispers of wisdom. My spirit will rise |
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