Open Poetry #36 |
The Triple Murder |
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Windsock at an airport: An orioles nest catches wind atop A sugar maple staff, now stripped Of all its color-summer Green, and autumn orange: Three crows, seeking clearance Land-all grasping tarmac branches, Coughing scratchy rune-like songs From these as black as vinyl records; The years calendar, turns The crank of an old victrola- Summers song, is now inaudible... But the spring, rewound again-sends Clear aloft a cold November tune Of rubbing limbs, their creeks, And moans; the ravens, black as jet Set wings, the triple murder dives- And then, like planes that rise on drafts, Lift... into the early winter sky. [This message has been edited by ice (11-02-2005 05:22 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write Ford! Stark images of Autumn's end and Winter's cold grey beginning. Awesome imagery!!! IWIHWT! Hugs~Nancy ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford You have a way of drawing your emotional imagery from nature, that is amazing. I hope that I can learn by reading you. |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
the ravens, black as jet Set wings, and the triple murder dives- And then, like planes that rise on drafts, Lift into the early winter sky. impressive write ice really liked the end of it bravo ~wolf |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Ford, hey, how are you? This read was extravagent with visuals which made me feel every single word...enjoyed the way you made me feel nature in every aspect of it's glory, even in it's lost days, now draining all the sap it possbily can, so summer can hibernate and rest well. Using the black birds, depicted to me, the writers love for the warmth of summer, yet, also steatches the knowledge of a deeply instilled acceptance of what is, for what must be.... wonderful ride here, terrific write! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm lovin this one, Ford, for all the gorgeous stark imagery filled with metaphor |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And if I might add, a triple crown? *battin' eyelashes* Nodding here. I keep telling myself that everything is exactly the way it's supposed to be. . I keep telling myself that. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
A fine read. Love it :-) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Whoa! Ford, your style is really showing in this one! Could just see it! ...jo |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are several reasons I so enjoy reading you... this is but one of them. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you, poet friends, for reading and your kind replies.... I have always been facinated by the way that corbies fill their spot in the natural world...how inteligent they are, how they survive from day to day,,how beautiful they are...call them crows or ravens whatever, these three seemed special and, what I wrote was what I witnessed, just a picture of what they did in front of me.. -------ice ><> |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big angel hugs) Yay! Oh Ford, crows are soooooo intelligent indeed and I've always loved crows too because they are one of the best parenting birds to their children, as I learned from the BBC production "The Life of Birds"! (smiles) I think they really are metaphor in flight, and truly have made much of some of the finest poetry tothis day, yay, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ford, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" |
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