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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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If These the Smallest Can Then So Can We A tiny thing is white and gray with tail curled under on which to lay hyperventilating breath and heartbeat plain upon its chest Reminder of the things that show how life is for the littlest know finding a hiding place like this takes some planning I say to it Curled at back of dove’s keep next to the wire and mother sitting eggs there she looks but doesn’t blink red eyes almost tame but still her instinct is only for her babies to survive Run her instinct says within her feathers feel this creature’s teeth can’t you see are sharp and real and wire would not stop feral demand for lunch of that under your breast of steel As I watch in wonder this scene play out the two who would be enemies out in the wild sit face to face as if on life reflecting and how the world could be with peace protecting ------ explanation I have an aviary of doves in my back yard. Between the glass in the back and the wire of the cage, a tiny rat has made a nest of feathers. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I know this feeling...of barest transparent minimum between me and heartbreak...though I've never kept doves. It's universal, and you capture it so very well. So too, the universality of that dangerous thing and the vulnerable creature, finding equilibrium....something I also know all too intimately. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the parallel you have written is so intricant, so full of images....wonderful write dear lady |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A beautiful write Martie, but I sure hope it is not a waiting game on the part of the rat  To me a little rat is the beginning of a big rat, and at that point I would yell for Balladeer  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Martie, smiling wide here. I can see her, the dove watching intently, the rat. Always fantastic penning by you. m xx ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Such interesting studies. I so enjoy your writing! miscee |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ahh.... but I know the scene. I've touched the screen...even fancied the wisp of the poet that writes...oh, the wisp is all around, too... in all the rooms, in all of the books, in all of the air... No wonder the rat found... home. She is but a mother...and just gives life. Can you tell? It is libraried...  "There's a reason they call God The Creator - he sides with talent." Julia Cameron |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Martie, In observation, I have been the rat, the dove, and the writer. Where will the next wind blow? Thanks for this, it gives me comfort, just being able to connect. Doc |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yet another fantastic write Martie!! Hugs~Nancy ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Nature is such a wonder, isn't it Martie? So well written! Much enjoyed. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - you capture the scene most vividly but always through your words we can see. I have many wild doves that hog the food and fight amongst themselves but never with the smaller birds. They seem to know they are the intruders because the small ones nest in the tree. Rats? No - I don't fancy them. Wonderful right as usual. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You have such a wonderful way of seeing, Martie.....and writing!  .....jo |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ I can very well 'see' the scene ... through the eyes of you ... we see things we wouldn't ordinarily see~ Thank you dear poetess~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martie This reminds me of a poem I recently posted... The lion will lay down next to the lamb.. The Rat next to the dove... The Mohammedan next to the Christain All kinds of pictures entered my mind when I read this, thanks for the visions... ----------ice ><> |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you say it oh so very well - loved this - I can see the nest - Paul |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I really enjoyed this. We watch a very lively little squirrel in our back yard, that pleasures in teasing doves, other squirrels or anything. He'll edge closer and closer until the other takes chase. Then he goes like a streak of lightening. Rae |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big angel hugs) Oh Martie, as always, your words always depict the wonders of the world sooooooo beautifully and make gorgeous art out of them, yay! (smiles) Often it is said that when something happens it is "just nature's way" and I guess poetry is meant to challenge that dogma, LOL, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to each other" Mother Teresa |
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