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curiosity kills the cat |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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poor-ass smoke, darts me off like a lover sharp green eyes hangs onto every one of my fingers drunk on no particulars simply hooked on the curious… do we ever hear the background noise? or really taste that bottle of beer? go figure… he threw darts at me, like popcorn in a movie theater whipping my ass.. flecking fast balls towards me like a pitcher in the world series i was screaming feeling my way around in the dark then all of a sudden, there it was the lottery ticket with secret numbers of probability, tormenting tantalizing me with hopes of fortune sweet, thrilling surprise of first impression in the shape of imagination mine! somehow deciving first impressions oh the lies we tell to ourselves! talk about the transformation of dreaming a little! well, he orders a bottle for himself telling all my secrets withdrawing the forthy thousand from my bank account he’s well fed and hot now and i had to take a swig from that bottle bam! bam! bam! his stint undresses at “his” leisure rubbing his bare chest like a wanna be fur coat unbuttoning slumber and summer followed by clouds where bareness weeps embarassment he drove me to the station where dogs tore at my flesh it was like the hotel california the one you can never leave the one you never forget! i whined like a beggar while he fondled my mind with hypocrytical slander wishing me every kind of misfortune like a religion with a pretty face taking my daydreams shuffling them.. his eyes ordered my faith reinstating my faults to a bloody rape of his life his voice that spit in my face damnation, darkens the eyes you know turns the heart into a code blue chill his resolute face, listless served an elegant move an enormous load of white sugar unsympathetic filled with ego and a wedding cake of ceremonial shop windows… i held my tongue and listened one thing that he couldn’t steal it was my nightmare that trimmed black beard of his danced all over, like a doll, inventing housework and a solumn truth of infidelity God, I hated those woman, who Believed him to… cuts you like the long sharp teeth of black demons drewling for your soul your mind any sanity at all you claim for yours closing the door to any human shapes carrying a tray of instant worthlessness nailing my chest to his petrified wood the dumb ass…. he was that kind of stranger you didn’t know much about but shoulda perpetually, i’m still haunted by that book that reads “sleeping with the enemy” makes grey footprints in white snow pooping all over that white steed... i’m still looking over my shoulder even though he’s remarried poor poor girl! sheesh, and i so believed in love? there is no damn excuse for the red ink, he poured all over my child his high hooked shoulders damn, how quickly people change after marriage? gives a whole new meaning to “beware of the dog” still hitting myself in the forehead screaming Stupid’ Stupid Stupid But alive, very alive, doing well! think I'll claim that winning lottery ticket now~  [This message has been edited by LeeJ (10-28-2005 09:51 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lee, that was brilliant! You had my emotions running all over the place! At one point I cracked right up! ~ "rubbing his bare chest like a wanna be fur coat"! Gawd, girl! That was hysterical! You had so many clever lines in this poetic gem, that they all bear repeating! ~ and keeping!  Have a glorious day! You deserve it! ~ and now you get to keep all the money from winning lottery tickets!  Love & Life, Linda  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"i’m still looking over my shoulder even though he’s remarried poor poor girl! sheesh, and i so believed in love? there is no damn excuse for the red ink, he poured all over my child his high hooked shoulders damn, how quickly people change after marriage? gives a whole new meaning to “beware of the dog” still hitting myself in the forehead screaming Stupid’ Stupid Stupid But alive, very alive, doing well!" oh Lee, you can't know just how exactly perfect this is.... oh my gosh! I'm so keeping this  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, wow... such a powerful write... I don't think I remembered to breathe as I read... I know I was breathless by the end! As for that lottery ticket... you're due! *S* |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
very well put, thanks for sharing. Poetry can get you very far |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
whined like a beggar while he fondled my mind with hypocrytical slander wishing me every kind of misfortune like a religion with a pretty face wow... a good read for thought M |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Great write,.. Great read! Jason |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
good one lee. i have missed your writings My spirit will rise |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Great Write LeeJ, glad you survived. From where I'm sitting, I would say he was the stupid one. Wishing you all the best. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Lee! You continue to blow me away with your writing. Absolutely astounding!! Hugs~Nancy ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
closing the door to any human shapes carrying a tray of instant worthlessness nailing my chest to his petrified wood the dumb ass…. he was that kind of stranger you didn’t know much about but shoulda your writing never cuts a corner when telling it like it is is in order makes a good case for not wanting to trust again so fast |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I knew you were good, but Lordy, never in my imagination did I think you could pull this rabbit out of your poetic hat!!! Bravo!! |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
and a solumn truth of infidelity God, I hated those woman, who Believed him to __________________________ sheesh, and i so believed in love? there is no damn excuse for the red ink, he poured all over my child his high hooked shoulders damn, how quickly people change after marriage? gives a whole new meaning to “beware of the dog” still hitting myself in the forehead screaming Stupid’ Stupid Stupid I can honestly say........I was warned.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ I could see myself in your words, many years ago after the ever after died unhappy. So very well done!! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lee, this is a powerful write and I loved reading it!! You are such a good writer!! Hugs, Ethel |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Well now… My curiosity is sticking out its nose. What spurred this marvelous write? Very interesting read Lee J, very nice. JL |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'm so glad I've come a-foraging here today! I woke up hungry for poetry somehow....in spite of a rejection notice yesterday in which an editor asked me if I'd ever actually read his journal...of which I had four issues within arms' reach at that moment~~~~ouch!~~~~ ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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