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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2005-10-20 03:48 AM

Tonight,
  I can see my breath,
I am freeing ghosts within me,
they rise with the bitter wind.

I am horrified
by my certainties,
  I divide
like the Earth
split in two, I
wish that I could grow wings
and fly away,
   with this in mind,

   this,
  which I know
     is true...

But..
   I inhale..
dry, parched mouth,
skin asphyxiated,
  eyes mute, I
am without words..

Only the late whispers
that carry on
in hopeless echo,
digging
for complex answers,
in this, I

suffer deeply
for
the tones ring lonely sounds
that reside
inside
your  sweet aroma, I
love to taste the thought of you..

I see the moon
crawling languidly
across the sky,
another night
   silenced
   secluded
dissipating, without reason..

The root of these words
goes so deeply,
my judgement wounds me, and I
am still aware
of the fact
that when I reach to your warm hands
   for comfort,
grief and tears I cannot shed,
they will not be there..

You
are just
   a ghost.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2005-10-20 08:04 AM

"I love to taste the thought of you.."

Yes...that's how it is at times

I applaud your words and strength~~

besides... you have the cutest daughter

M

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2005-10-20 10:07 AM

I see the moon
crawling languidly
across the sky,
another night
silenced
secluded
dissipating, without reason..

Very emotional piece.
Much enjoyed. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2005-10-20 12:27 PM

" I
love to taste the thought of you.."

WOW!! Love the entire piece Meg..
but that line above..Just WOW!

Excellent write.

Hugs, Nancy

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me.~

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2005-10-20 02:50 PM

oh sweetie, how this aches...

c'mere you

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2005-10-20 03:47 PM

wow.
this is beautifully written, but so sad.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2005-10-20 03:52 PM

An absolutely wonderful write! Bit sad but great none the less.

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

7 posted 2005-10-21 12:33 PM

Wow...!!!!

Eric

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-10-21 04:26 PM

I love to taste the thought of you

my judgement wounds me,

Love these lines Meg..

for you

m xx

~i want for myself your trembling~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2005-10-21 04:49 PM

Tonight,
I can see my breath,
I am freeing ghosts within me,
they rise with the bitter wind.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I loved this powerful opening...
it set the tone perfectly for this bittersweet angsty write...
as always your depth of expression is impressive.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2005-10-21 06:19 PM

good read

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2005-11-23 12:28 PM

too many ghosts, not enough people

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

12 posted 2005-11-23 07:01 PM

Beautiful but so sad. It is amazing how pain can create such beauty.

- Owl

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

13 posted 2005-11-28 10:39 PM

But..
I inhale..
dry, parched mouth,
skin asphyxiated,
eyes mute, I
am without words..

I don't even need to say anything, you should know what i think, but WOW. just incase. x

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

14 posted 2005-11-28 11:45 PM

As sad as this write was I saw the beauty of your complex mind Meg, this was incredibly determined to make the reader feel for you, for them, for the loss of something tangible and inside. Beautiful work and I think one of my favorites of yours.

To see real beauty you must look with your heart.
~ Carpe diem ~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

15 posted 2005-11-29 12:46 PM

Kaoru, this is haunting, and oh so eloquently written.

....jo

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

16 posted 2005-12-01 09:02 AM

Meg, your poetry never ceases to stir emotions in me that I have conveniently suppressed. You bring them to the fore for re-examination ~ and that is a good thing ~ for then I can release them and set mine own self free!

You are a marvellously gifted writer!

Hugs with love to you and precious Freyja!

Linda

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