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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-10-11 01:51 AM



Now the clock is winding low,
not much more time
to gather fate
before you go to learn the lessons
for which you've suffered;  
so little left
that you can do no more than wait,
you who never believed in Death
will realize always it was true
Death so strongly believes in you.

©2005 by icebox

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2005-10-11 02:08 AM


Death so strongly believes in you.

WOW!

that last line just slapped me fair in the face...maree clears vision  

Fantastic!

mxx

~i want for myself your trembling~

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2005-10-11 07:24 AM


icebox
Always enjoy reading you.

Nightshade
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3 posted 2005-10-11 10:18 AM


Gave me shivers this did.
Very true words.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Martie
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4 posted 2005-10-11 10:43 AM


icebox

I think our culture conditions us to deny death....especially our own.  Your poem is like a nudge towards truth.  Thank you.  

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2005-10-11 12:24 PM


"before you go to learn the lessons
for which you've suffered"  


Oh how sad that they didn't learn them while here...

As always, your words scream of truth.


"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Enchantress
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6 posted 2005-10-11 12:28 PM


How very very true your words are!
Yes..indeed..we are all headed in the same direction, believe it or not.
Hugs~Nancy

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Huan Yi
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7 posted 2005-10-11 01:47 PM



Very good old Man


serenity blaze
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8 posted 2005-10-11 04:56 PM


I'm gonna be writing you on this one...

love,

grasshopper II


Robert Frazier
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9 posted 2005-10-11 06:09 PM


after this, what's left to say?
except, maybe, "seize the day"?

Rf

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10 posted 2005-10-11 08:25 PM


truth...I love it

this reminds me when someone told me the devil believes in me.

Geesh..

enjoyed

"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real"
-Linkin Park_

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11 posted 2005-10-12 05:38 PM


Makes it easier if you can learn 'em here....but that's so very hard, and always based on assumptions that might be wrong themselves, stick a magnet under your compass.....

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Earth Angel
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12 posted 2005-10-12 08:15 PM



A bit of a reality check! I think I best try to figure how to slow the hands on that proverbial clock! I don't want the Grim One reaping my bones any time soon! Scared To Death 2


EA

Angelheart
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13 posted 2005-10-12 10:16 PM


dang this did make me feel something, you just never know when its your time, thanks for sharing.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Sharksbean
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14 posted 2005-10-12 10:21 PM


this gave me the shudders it... was... good thank you for sharing icebox

-may the force be with you in poetry

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2005-10-13 02:33 AM


Reminded me of something I heard on the radio today..."Sometimes God retires us."...James
iliana
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16 posted 2005-10-13 02:44 AM


There is death and there are deaths and I am not sure what the difference is.  Nor am I sure of what the difference in life and death really are.  Maybe we are dead now in a way and free when we cross over into the wider space.  See, there you go, getting me thinking again.  There is no doubt, though, that changes happen.  There's a growing worldwide anxiety about the end  times now which the major news channels are of course playing into, and maybe the Earth will have no more of us because it can only take so much without vomiting us out....but I do believe in the divine spirit that each of us has within us and it's undefinable beginning and ending....well, that's what I am going to hang onto.  Just hope there's a good use for me on the other side....lol.  Thought provoking read, Mr. C.   .....jo
littlewing
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17 posted 2005-10-13 10:37 AM


icey?

The only way I can even begin to respond to this is a repost, I have no other words than this:

Synthesis

It can be disputed,
that the dying breath
of man
is composed solely
of flushed, angelic breeze.

Not unlike
a delicate touch,
traversing each curve of hip
and thigh,
while lying, entwined
beneath a cool summer’s morn’.

It can be disputed,
that such temperate breeze
resembles the joy felt
upon hearing an infant’s first wail.

It has been proven,
that one’s last breath
is nothing more
than carbon dioxide
and nutrients, dispelled.

I have seen more death than life.

I embody the bile
rising from the city’s sewers.

Vomited,
from the cracked and bleeding mouths
of our forefathers.

The gutters ejaculate, stinging my skin,
pricking, as needles.

No matter how I try,
I cannot be scrubbed clean.


I dispute,
that death is anything pleasant.

For the living.

I have seen more death than life.

And I braid its bony fingers,
within my own.

LeeJ
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18 posted 2005-10-13 11:25 AM


whoa!  

chillingly effective....causes one to ponder...this was a tremendous write with a touch of poe, and those cold winter winds, reaching up from the darkest grave, twising the arm of fate....

well done...well done!

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