icebox
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2005-10-11
01:51 AM
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Now the clock is winding low, not much more time to gather fate before you go to learn the lessons for which you've suffered; so little left that you can do no more than wait, you who never believed in Death will realize always it was true Death so strongly believes in you.
©2005 by icebox
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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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2005-10-11
02:08 AM
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Death so strongly believes in you.
WOW!
that last line just slapped me fair in the face...maree clears vision
Fantastic!
mxx
~i want for myself your trembling~
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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
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2005-10-11
07:24 AM
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icebox Always enjoy reading you.
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Nightshade
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since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962
just out of reach
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2005-10-11
10:18 AM
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Gave me shivers this did. Very true words. hugs, ChrisPoetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. ~Carl Sandburg
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
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2005-10-11
10:43 AM
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icebox
I think our culture conditions us to deny death....especially our own. Your poem is like a nudge towards truth. Thank you.
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Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
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2005-10-11
12:24 PM
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"before you go to learn the lessons for which you've suffered"
Oh how sad that they didn't learn them while here...
As always, your words scream of truth.
"too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~
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Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
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2005-10-11
12:28 PM
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How very very true your words are! Yes..indeed..we are all headed in the same direction, believe it or not. Hugs~Nancy~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile.~
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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688
Waukegan
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2005-10-11
01:47 PM
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Very good old Man
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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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2005-10-11
04:56 PM
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I'm gonna be writing you on this one...
love,
grasshopper II
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Robert Frazier
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2005-10-11
06:09 PM
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after this, what's left to say? except, maybe, "seize the day"?
Rf
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Temptress
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Mobile, AL
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2005-10-11
08:25 PM
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truth...I love it
this reminds me when someone told me the devil believes in me.
Geesh..
enjoyed"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real" -Linkin Park_
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Ratleader
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2005-10-12
05:38 PM
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Makes it easier if you can learn 'em here....but that's so very hard, and always based on assumptions that might be wrong themselves, stick a magnet under your compass.....~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________
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Earth Angel
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2005-10-12
08:15 PM
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A bit of a reality check! I think I best try to figure how to slow the hands on that proverbial clock! I don't want the Grim One reaping my bones any time soon!
EA
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Angelheart
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since 2005-09-08
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Jacksonville,FL USA
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2005-10-12
10:16 PM
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dang this did make me feel something, you just never know when its your time, thanks for sharing.Poetry can get you very far -Laura
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Sharksbean
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2005-10-12
10:21 PM
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this gave me the shudders it... was... good thank you for sharing icebox -may the force be with you in poetry
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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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2005-10-13
02:33 AM
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Reminded me of something I heard on the radio today..."Sometimes God retires us."...James
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iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
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2005-10-13
02:44 AM
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There is death and there are deaths and I am not sure what the difference is. Nor am I sure of what the difference in life and death really are. Maybe we are dead now in a way and free when we cross over into the wider space. See, there you go, getting me thinking again. There is no doubt, though, that changes happen. There's a growing worldwide anxiety about the end times now which the major news channels are of course playing into, and maybe the Earth will have no more of us because it can only take so much without vomiting us out....but I do believe in the divine spirit that each of us has within us and it's undefinable beginning and ending....well, that's what I am going to hang onto. Just hope there's a good use for me on the other side....lol. Thought provoking read, Mr. C. .....jo
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littlewing
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New York
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2005-10-13
10:37 AM
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icey?
The only way I can even begin to respond to this is a repost, I have no other words than this:
Synthesis
It can be disputed, that the dying breath of man is composed solely of flushed, angelic breeze.
Not unlike a delicate touch, traversing each curve of hip and thigh, while lying, entwined beneath a cool summer’s morn’.
It can be disputed, that such temperate breeze resembles the joy felt upon hearing an infant’s first wail.
It has been proven, that one’s last breath is nothing more than carbon dioxide and nutrients, dispelled.
I have seen more death than life.
I embody the bile rising from the city’s sewers.
Vomited, from the cracked and bleeding mouths of our forefathers.
The gutters ejaculate, stinging my skin, pricking, as needles.
No matter how I try, I cannot be scrubbed clean.
I dispute, that death is anything pleasant.
For the living.
I have seen more death than life.
And I braid its bony fingers, within my own.
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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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2005-10-13
11:25 AM
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whoa!
chillingly effective....causes one to ponder...this was a tremendous write with a touch of poe, and those cold winter winds, reaching up from the darkest grave, twising the arm of fate....
well done...well done!
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