Open Poetry #36 |
Especially In Autumn |
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Especially in autumn, I admire women With streaks in their hair- Like leaf tints on October oaks Telling of life experiences, That sprouted in short springs And grew over long summers. * A wheel on my cart is stuck- Another, same problem- Side swipes a stack of Cheerios, Parked along the isleside; Looking up At the sound of the crash, Rubber-necking, I see Red lips, and meteor showers In mid-night hair, Above white shoulders; A sidelong glance arrests My momentary stare, At the lovely someone That has crashed Into a something-now bent low To make a slow retrieve from The valley of cereals, floor; I send an admiration glance At the form that makes pretty, The ugly, modern-boring Supermarket geography; And I catch what I sought- A permission wink, To thank my look That begs no why answer- A simple attest of cave-people need Of innocent, ego inflation... (Especially craved in autumn) Carts pass...the moment lingers For only a moment, And is soon forgotten... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Love this! Nothing like a flattering, complimentary glance when least expected. Well done & much enjoyed. Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ahhh, Ford~ What a picturesque moment you've shared~ I LOVE IT ... and ... I'm sure it won't be forgotten anytime soon~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Thank you, Chris, for the flattering comment... And also for your little Sandurg quote.. "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance" To which I feel the need to add... "We may but pass as the world goes by And take from a look of eyes into eyes, A film of hope and a memoried day." By that same great master of verse- (Carl Sandburg-excerpt-"Dream Girl" Both quotes in my mind, greatly enhancing my poem... ********************************** Thank you, Marge..... I guess the last line of my poem is really a fib, deep in the spirit, these type of encounters are stored, and not easily forgotten.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is beyond beautiful.. and I know the feeling to be given an unexpected certain 'look' it does do wonders for the ego especially in Autumn. A keeper m'friend....for sure a keeper. You do pen beautiful, exquisite poetry. Don't tell God how great the storm is.. |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
this is very nice. and what fine way for the season, thanks for sharing. Poetry can get you very far |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ice, I cannot af-Ford to pass by one of your poems on nature! ~ and I see that this intriguing write included some fascinating natural instincts! I enjoy everything that you write! Linda |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ford...I hate going grocery shopping, but this (almost) makes it seem fun. I think I'll head over to Vons and replenish my Cheerios!! You're such a lovely man!! |
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xFromtheHeartx Member
since 2005-09-24
Posts 80Florida U.S. |
beautiful poem! cant wait for the next one! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Had to come back for another read... and to place you into my library. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is kind of an autumnal dissertation and it is greatly appreciated by this reader. Such a glance can make your day! Very beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
if only grocery shopping were like this more often eh? smiling enjoyed you here Maree ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a nice look into your window and what tickles your fancy |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Dear poet friends... Thank you, one and all, for reading, and the very nice replies..... It makes my heart warm when I am understood, and even warmer when, when I write is accepted as pretty good poetry. Peace to all..... -------------ice/ford ><> |
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Sharksbean Member
since 2005-09-25
Posts 368jax |
i didnt understand it but i enjoyed it all the same |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
And I catch what I sought- A permission wink, To thank my look That begs no why answer- A simple attest of cave-people need Of innocent, ego inflation... this entire poem was flaming gold, but this, this brought a chuckle of admiration...fondness...you go guy...thanks for the joy and smiles |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Well said Ford. :-) |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice, I so admire your descriptions...e.g., "With streaks in their hair- Like leaf tints on October oaks." I really liked this one very much. ....jo |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Lovely, warm work there. Much enjoyed. "The moon ain't romantic, it's intimidating as hell". -- Tom Waits, 'Bad Live and a Broken Heart' |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
lol the only time I can REMEMBER dumping a supermarket aisle display, all I saw was a small child staring, pointing a finger at me, and laughing Ford, I like your scene better meet you at the market...I need to dump an aisleway |
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