Open Poetry #36 |
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The Church Under the Streetlight |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
And so... Under my porch Swings your savoir faire You stand legs opened To whatever Silver dollar rolls your way Walk with a stutter and a Dip in your hip you Grab at the lights in Complete yellow-stained darkness The lamp is your crusader The street your blazing saddle Streetlight serpentine Sex-stained imperfections of Your crawling flesh And yet You still stand Bowing to the bulb-ous King of Nickel and Dime Juke Joints and Fatties rolled on Your tip’s dashboard Under my porch Thighs a mile wide Breasts sky high With the wine-stamped breath of A night of $20 merriment and Your business card Tattooed to the Porcelain nightlight Your sanctuary and Homemade temple of Nightly worship Waiting for the next Late night Lonlies to Bring forth their Tithes and offerings Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This struck me as the life of the oldest profession. A culture of it's own, giving comfort and pleasure for payment. Your description was eloquent in several lines, and I thought... "How many times God was called upon under that very street lamp". Unique write. TD |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Thank you so much for your reply...I was actually struck with the inspiration from a friend. She told me to write about a streetlight...and that's what came to mind. Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Camiele~ Check your email ... I REALLY do like this piece~ Wow ... to be so inspired !! To take a 'suggestion' from someone and paint such a poetic scene takes talent ... I think you've got it !! *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*No matter what I search for ... |
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Obsidian Snow Member
since 2005-08-24
Posts 88 |
This was wonderful! The chilling description was dead on. |
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Sharksbean Member
since 2005-09-25
Posts 368jax |
Dark. i liked it. thanks for sharing this slightly creepy poem. trust me when i say this is a compliment ![]() |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Good write! |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well written streetlight scenery. I appreciate the way you presented this in a nonjudgemental manner, which is difficult to do with this very old street profession and all its consequences. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Thank you all so much...I am completely overwhelmed by the compliments you all have paid me! Thank you so very much from the very depths of me to you!! Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and I saw a fire fly by mandan lake playing under her favorite oak flirting with the embers of a distant fireplace enjoyed it ms |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Fighting the good fight yv. I love it! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
DS~as always...it's a pleasure to know that I can evoke pleasure from within you! Steven~I only do what I can with what I see...but I appreciate your support! James~I'm glad you enjoyed my work! Thank you all for your kindness! Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
It takes one heckuvvalotta talent to turn your friend's suggestion into a poem of this depth and quality. A very fine write, yv! Very fine, indeed! ![]() EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I haven't been responding much lately...but I wanted to take some time to respond to this piece and you... Your talent is stunning to say the least. I found this piece spellbinding and it made me want more. I hope to see your name on the boards a lot more. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
what can one say when one has to read and reread to gain all that is within a piece written and posted here... that is to say I enjoyed~~ M |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Thank you all sooo very much for your thousand kindesses!! EA~what can I say...to get any kind of copliment from you...I just feel completely blessed that you even read my work! HaHa! Madame Caldwell~you are too kind...way to kind...I thank you so much! NakdThoughts~I appreciate your kindness...I'm truly touched. Thank you all...your words truly touch me! Yv~Seeing eternal Sunshine |
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