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Christopher
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0 posted 2005-09-20 08:02 PM


...Wish They Were Birds
©2005 C.G. Ward


it's like a prick
from the tip
of a witless whip...

the kind attached to a trick of verbiage
desultory & detatchedly damning the questionable lineage
of a man who just couldn't care one way or t'other.

but you're angry at the moment,
not shy about the little bubble of irritation
wisping out the corners of your mouth
like a goldfish in heat.

---

do goldfish go into heat?
or is spawning more like the nights you
aren't mad,
aren't exactly happy,
but are teetering at the edge of a mood best described as...

well, perhaps best not described.

---

i remember the other night
when you plied me away from my book
and forced a review of the weekly 'i'm-a-princess' pageant
- you parading around like a peacock half-dressed -
then sniffed when i didn't praise
didn't damn,
didn't give a damn about what you're [not] wearing
for the adoring public of this little pond.

bright lights and big cities
are just the paris-fashion 'round here.
cardboard cutout semi-super models,
a silver-grey mazda (not. quite. a. beemer.)
and play-pretend friends
mix together with some boozin' that sounds more like
a visit to some nyphomaniac's beachside nirvana
instead of something halfway potable.

the funny thing i realized
as i went back to my book,
is that you're not even the big fish.
not even a big fish.
there are a lot of other goldfish around here
and like you,
they all wish they were birds.





egowhores.com - really love yourself.

© Copyright 2005 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2005-09-20 08:19 PM


I'm sorry for the lack of words...but WOW!

Great to read you Christopher.

one for the library indeed.

M  

~i want for myself your trembling~

Martie
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2 posted 2005-09-20 08:38 PM


Christopher...Sad how communication breaks down like that....I would rather be a bird...goldfish always belly up on me.  Your poem touched me with its honesty.  
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3 posted 2005-09-20 10:06 PM


Christopher....

this is an amazing look into the honest moments of a relationship....you say it like no other....hugsss you, good to see you.....

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There are moments when speech
is but a mouth pressed lightly and
humbly against the angel's hands
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LyricFetish
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4 posted 2005-09-20 11:41 PM


Wow. So real, and so true.
"A visit to some nymphomaniac's beachside nirvana".
Always hold out for THE big fish, right? So they say. I love your poem.

*Meredith  

I'm not your type,
I'm not inflatable.

Christopher
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5 posted 2005-09-21 12:38 PM


I don't know how honest it is to write something only to avoid having to do some "real" work - about the only honest thing about this piece is my name under the title.

I do, however, thank all who read and express their appreciation.

egowhores.com - really love yourself.

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6 posted 2005-09-21 06:12 PM


LOL, loved that little bubblefishmouththingie
Angelheart
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7 posted 2005-09-21 08:14 PM


oh midnite me too I like the part where it said described and then the bibled part where it said that he would rather not describe hehe..good poem thanks for sharing.

Poetry can get you very far
-Laura

Christopher
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8 posted 2005-10-03 12:32 PM


thank you two... as far as not describing: well, momma didn't raise no fool!
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9 posted 2005-11-05 06:12 PM


But....a goldfish can be nice..../pip/Forum81/HTML/001387.html

Hmmmm, maybe I should have sought a bird.....


Dang this is one fine poem -- I like the ramble of it, and boy do I ever like the thoughts in it!

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10 posted 2005-11-05 06:51 PM


I dreamt of fish that could swim through the air.

It was almost as cool as this poem, C.

(btw...we should definitely not menstruate together. )

awesome you

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11 posted 2005-11-07 01:12 AM


Well, it feels great to read some good poetry. I haven't been around here in a while.

I love this. I love the way you just write things without the drama. It all comes out intelligently and with emotion (again...without the drama)

enjoyed, Chris

its good to "see" you

"I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real"
-Linkin Park_

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12 posted 2005-11-07 09:05 AM


I don't know why I waited so long to read this. Perhaps because I knew that your words would simply blow me away. And they did..Whooooooooosh!!
Awesome Christopher.   hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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13 posted 2005-11-07 10:11 PM


Excellent, Chris! You gave a very detailed description of the princess-in-waiting in question.

"a silver-grey mazda (not. quite. a. beemer.)"

That line enough says it all. Great descriptive techniques...

Hey! I remember the days of bird references


Huan Yi
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14 posted 2005-11-08 01:33 AM



Christopher,

Reminds me of David Ignatow's
"Tenderness"

John

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15 posted 2005-11-10 10:26 AM


This is a very interesting write. It's different from the type of poems I usually
read but I enjoyed it a lot. Lots of luck,
bgj

Nicole
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16 posted 2005-11-11 01:14 PM


Yeah, I'm pretty sure goldfish don't go into  heat - and if so...ew.


Pilgrimage
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17 posted 2005-11-11 01:16 PM


Oh my goodness.  You cut with a dagger, right to the bone.  Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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18 posted 2005-11-15 04:45 PM


Brutal, but brimming with honesty.  You seem rather Whitman-esque with your flow of thought--I definitely liked it.  

Awesome poetry, but that doesn't even need to be said.  I expect the best from you.

~*Krista Lee Knutson*~

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of time like dew on the tip of a leaf.
~Rabindranath Tagore


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