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...Wish They Were Birds
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...Wish They Were Birds |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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...Wish They Were Birds ©2005 C.G. Ward it's like a prick from the tip of a witless whip... the kind attached to a trick of verbiage desultory & detatchedly damning the questionable lineage of a man who just couldn't care one way or t'other. but you're angry at the moment, not shy about the little bubble of irritation wisping out the corners of your mouth like a goldfish in heat. --- do goldfish go into heat? or is spawning more like the nights you aren't mad, aren't exactly happy, but are teetering at the edge of a mood best described as... well, perhaps best not described. --- i remember the other night when you plied me away from my book and forced a review of the weekly 'i'm-a-princess' pageant - you parading around like a peacock half-dressed - then sniffed when i didn't praise didn't damn, didn't give a damn about what you're [not] wearing for the adoring public of this little pond. bright lights and big cities are just the paris-fashion 'round here. cardboard cutout semi-super models, a silver-grey mazda (not. quite. a. beemer.) and play-pretend friends mix together with some boozin' that sounds more like a visit to some nyphomaniac's beachside nirvana instead of something halfway potable. the funny thing i realized as i went back to my book, is that you're not even the big fish. not even a big fish. there are a lot of other goldfish around here and like you, they all wish they were birds. egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm sorry for the lack of words...but WOW! Great to read you Christopher. one for the library indeed. M  ~i want for myself your trembling~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Christopher...Sad how communication breaks down like that....I would rather be a bird...goldfish always belly up on me. Your poem touched me with its honesty.  |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Christopher.... this is an amazing look into the honest moments of a relationship....you say it like no other....hugsss you, good to see you.....  ~~**~~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Wow. So real, and so true. "A visit to some nymphomaniac's beachside nirvana". Always hold out for THE big fish, right? So they say. I love your poem. *Meredith I'm not your type, |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I don't know how honest it is to write something only to avoid having to do some "real" work - about the only honest thing about this piece is my name under the title.  I do, however, thank all who read and express their appreciation. egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, loved that little bubblefishmouththingie |
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Angelheart Senior Member
since 2005-09-08
Posts 754Jacksonville,FL USA |
oh midnite me too I like the part where it said described and then the bibled part where it said that he would rather not describe hehe..good poem thanks for sharing. Poetry can get you very far |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
thank you two... as far as not describing: well, momma didn't raise no fool! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
But....a goldfish can be nice..../pip/Forum81/HTML/001387.html Hmmmm, maybe I should have sought a bird..... Dang this is one fine poem -- I like the ramble of it, and boy do I ever like the thoughts in it! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I dreamt of fish that could swim through the air. It was almost as cool as this poem, C. (btw...we should definitely not menstruate together.  )awesome you |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, it feels great to read some good poetry. I haven't been around here in a while. I love this. I love the way you just write things without the drama. It all comes out intelligently and with emotion (again...without the drama) enjoyed, Chris its good to "see" you "I want to heal, I want to feel, like I'm close to something real" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I don't know why I waited so long to read this. Perhaps because I knew that your words would simply blow me away. And they did..Whooooooooosh!! Awesome Christopher. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent, Chris! You gave a very detailed description of the princess-in-waiting in question. "a silver-grey mazda (not. quite. a. beemer.)" That line enough says it all. Great descriptive techniques... Hey! I remember the days of bird references |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Christopher, Reminds me of David Ignatow's "Tenderness" John |
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bgj Member
since 2005-11-09
Posts 128Ga. USA |
This is a very interesting write. It's different from the type of poems I usually read but I enjoyed it a lot. Lots of luck, bgj |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Yeah, I'm pretty sure goldfish don't go into heat - and if so...ew. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oh my goodness. You cut with a dagger, right to the bone. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Brutal, but brimming with honesty. You seem rather Whitman-esque with your flow of thought--I definitely liked it. Awesome poetry, but that doesn't even need to be said. I expect the best from you. ~*Krista Lee Knutson*~ |
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