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Shadow Dance |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Shadow Dance  Fall is scratching at the windows Calling me out to see Fingers in reach of sky, in hope That we would know eternity… It calls at me to look beyond The daily scope of we While shadows dance in glorious Escape of you, and me. When I age, begin decline And gray before the light Let fall come scratch my way And I will walk into the night For that is where I'll find my love... For that is where I'll find my Love. Revised repost. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
how about: "When I AGED and began decline And my chest hair has turned gray, And now I only speak of conquests That I had in better days..... Or like that country song out now "I'm not a good as I once was, but I'm as good once, as I ever was".....this is a good write gal.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine Well I've been into shadows lately and yours looks pretty good.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Kari There is great evidance in the paper trails you have left, this being no exception, that despite shadows of everyday life, you take time to not only find perceptiveness in the voice of nature, but see it as well...which definately pours your charicture into many, wonderful enlightening songs. Good Morning! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I can hear the scratching, see the shadow, visualize the matching... Nice and gentle, the way I like misc'e |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Oh yes...this beautifully leads us down the path with...an elegant poem that fits perfectly an elegant lady...*big hugs* |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karilea! Look at my signature line! Wonderful words my dear friend. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
and how you remind me how much I am looking forward to fall |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lovely this... Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile. Just popped in for a short and I'm off again.. the water is calling me. *grin* ..and a gazebo awaits.  Hugs YOU! Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie....I love shadows, as you know...and I also love to dance! This was both and also beautifully done!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You have so masterfully rendered the melancholy and the beauty of the shadow's dance. Awesome. Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Shadows are gray, but they are a feature of sunshine....if you become more like them that's not loss, it's fulfillment -- only an outward sign that you're taking on a wider range of that which you are, and will always be. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Beautiful Karilea, as always. I love the fall. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ I will just echo RatMan's beautiful poetic reply~ Echo ... echo ... echo~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you find beauty in the simple things.....hugsss you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
SIL, couldn't help but nod to this one. I think Ratleader summed up so well what I was thinking after reading. And, yes, it is a song. ......jo |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Shadow Dance, Love it! "When I age, begin decline And gray before the light Let fall come scratch my way And I will walk into the night" SG |
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