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Upon a Dark and Stormy Night
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Upon a Dark and Stormy Night |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
In darkness complete off the stormy street He lit the waiting candle so long and thin, Hidden from shadows behind drawn windows, Yet the thunder sound kept rolling in. The power failed and the sirens wailed Leaving but the lone flickering light Then there came the battering rain Sounding pounding deep into the night. More light he’ll need if perchance to read The tomes of long forgotten lore, So the flame did share with another taper there And he went searching for even more; Walking with care up the dark rising stair To the highest room where he did store; Through window did flash followed by thunder crash As bright streaks danced across the floor. There should be more candles there put away with care In an old dresser of many memories from time, Memories of far places and pictures of young faces That had grown old everywhere but in his mind. In folded cloths once worn soon after he was born And the booties in which his first step was took This was the wrong drawer, no candles did it store, So he shut it quickly and in another place did look. In another strobe lighting it gave him a brief sighting Of an old oil lamp upon the table across the room, It was then he realized the dark had tricked his eyes And he had somehow entered into the wrong room. It could not have been fate, it was just dark and late, Perhaps nothing but a bit of smoke distorting his view, The lamped gave its light pushing back the dark of night And he saw many things old at once anew. The room wasn’t bare with walls of books and several chairs, A rug from an Aunt only known from his childhood days, An old sofa and loveseat hidden under an off white sheet, Steamer trunks and cardboard boxes long since put away. There were pictures on the wall he had trouble to recall Of where or when they had come into his keeping, This was a mild mystery which this time did not need to be It would soon be time for him to be sleeping. Blowing out the lamp light only his candle against the night Walked out the room and across the narrow hallway Opening the door wide to where his mirrors did hide The flickering on the silvery surfaces did play, He gathered the wax cylinders and quickly left there, Where to many self images had reflected chance to roam, Then there in the living room many candles against the gloom, When suddenly electricity relit his home. The storm had abated, its fierceness for now sated, And all was returning to what was before the storm, Yet after such a great spill the air had a touch of chill And a smell of ozone where the sky was torn, So with a puff of breath sent the flame to its death, Leaving the wax pillars there where they stood With the dying of the rain he took up his cane And went for a stroll in the neighborhood. Gloom |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I enjoyed this so much! You tell a story very well, and for me? This would have taken forever to write!  a keeper... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This had the beginning of Poe's sound... and since you encourage Critique... and while we ALL know that my ear is sometimes thumpy at best  , a fewsmall revisions could be made to tighten this up... want me to send my thoughts to you? Or just leave you be? So good to read you! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you Sea Pleased you enjoyed, I did take a bit of time with this story, Prose taking most of my writing these day. Thank you, Sunshine Always a joy to see your comments I would be pleased to receive your thoughts of improvement. Gloom |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Storms can be clensing and memories have their place....interesting write, Gloomy guy.  ....jo |
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