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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I walk a thousand miles alone in my thoughts. My skin cold with lack of warmth, lack of touch. I think about times when things were worse. I was scared to take a chance on change. I can still feel the burn of lonely. The chill of dismissal. Your finger as it traced my spine. I wonder why it is that I’m always waiting for a hand to brush my face, for lips to whisper a smile to my eyes. Things work out better in my mind. A cracked shell still holds water. Turbulent seas offer sustenance, and two hearts hear each other from a distance. I can’t tell you for sure what it is I need. But I can hear our beat and it’s a bit out of sync. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Did you write this for me????  sighing~ M psstt..gonna save this one |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Things work out better in my mind. A cracked shell still holds water. Turbulent seas offer sustenance, and two hearts hear each other from a distance." oh my gosh I love this part.... exactly...perfectly....  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Susan, I hearya, gal! I've been there, and you could not have expressed those feelings better than you just did ~ and so eloquently at that! "Arrhythmia" ~ Perfect title! "But I can hear our beat and it’s a bit out of sync." ~ Perfect ending! ~ as was everthing you wrote in between!  Linda P.S. If this is truly how you are feeling at the present time, I am giving you a loving, understanding heart hug.  |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Oh WOW!!! Powerful emotions that touch the heart...*big hugs* Draw on the love you are assured of here and let your heart beat at your own pace and let him tune to you...*hugs* |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Things always go better in my thoughts. But my thoughts can't trace a finger down my spine. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your finger as it traced my spine. I wonder why it is that I’m always waiting for a hand to brush my face, for lips to whisper a smile to my eyes. Things work out better in my mind. A cracked shell still holds water. Turbulent seas offer sustenance, and two hearts hear each other from a distance. I can’t tell you for sure what it is I need. But I can hear our beat and it’s a bit out of sync. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Well this is a bittersweet beauty... loved the metapor and the way your tied it all in from title to last verse... very cool write Susan... A porch puppy told me yesterday was your Birthday sorry I missed the actual day, but wanted to send a mothy wish for a year of things that make you smile and inspire you... Happy B-day girlie.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I can’t tell you for sure what it is I need. But I can hear our beat and it’s a bit out of sync." Excellent write Susan... Hope you had a Happy Birthday. *Just read JM's reply* ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A belated Happy Birthday, Susan... and as for this bittersweet... Well, the title drew me in...great start... and you kept the irregular run of the heart throughout! Good job, m'dear! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I second what Kari said...Happy Birthday lovely lady This was great especially.... I wonder why it is that I’m always waiting for a hand to brush my face, for lips to whisper a smile to my eye Usedd to wonder that myself...and have come to realize, it is self we're searching for...to gain knowledge and understanding of who we really are, and what we desire...upon finding out so many things about ourselves, we realize, we've been loved all this time... Hugs to ya and have a marvelous weekend. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all! just a weird week over here. yep..the porch puppy called me and wished me happy birthday....  Dunc!and thank you all for the birthday wishes...the party is tomorrow!! A BBQ in the rain!! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Turbulent seas offer sustenance, and two hearts hear each other from a distance." This stuck out for me. I know what you mean, Susan. ....jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can sure understand this write... loved how it began and ended, and everything in the middle Happy Birthday to you |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful writing, Susan, and the title could not be more perfect....happy birthday!  |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Gosh Susan, this was great !! I just love it when your pen starts talking Tima |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all!! and the party Saturday was great!! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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