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Greeneyes
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2005-06-19 12:12 PM



the rain mixes with  oil

noun/s


river
ocean
dragonfly
l o v e

light


so what ever
is left of these
are given to the single source
between elements

&


tears
will run down my cheeks

for you to

claim me
when you are hidden from view
but I see you

gathering cups of resolution
maybe the last night of loneliness

you know how hard it is right?

the window/s dark
you can not see any part of it

and yet, search for the colored sky
to shift reason and light

the edge is something
you can not cross

midnight is only
a change of sky

grace fell somewhere over us
along the empty street

still and cold
again and again

escaping between spaces


I keep a fragrance bottle my
muse gave me when I met him
in endless winter and he
settled me into remembering
who I am.

© Copyright 2005 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
ctowen
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since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
1 posted 2005-06-19 01:35 PM


.... even things that don't mix
        find to agree with each other .....


             Dragonflies compliment even the emptiest of souls.

                  liked this very much ....

Margherita
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Eternity
2 posted 2005-06-19 01:44 PM


quote:
midnight is only
a change of sky

grace fell somewhere over us
along the empty street

still and cold
again and again

escaping between spaces



And grace you express, dear Lauren, with your most beautiful poetry!

There is no place to escape to ... in the end we always have to face what is.

Love,
Margherita


Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

3 posted 2005-06-19 07:50 PM


gathering cups of resolution
maybe the last night of loneliness

you know how hard it is right?

the window/s dark
you can not see any part of it

and yet, search for the colored sky
to shift reason and light

the edge is something
you can not cross

midnight is only
a change of sky

grace fell somewhere over us
along the empty street

still and cold
again and again

escaping between spaces

oh Lord L~ you know I'm feeling this one with you, I know this.....
Hugs

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-06-19 07:56 PM


dang, I wish I could write like this
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2005-06-19 08:35 PM


Once again dear Lauren you have rendered me speechless.
Excellent excellent write.
Love ya lady~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2005-06-20 12:44 PM


"midnight is only
a change of sky"

Great writing!  Enjoyed!

timothysangel1973
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Never close enough
7 posted 2005-06-20 12:48 PM


dang

this is WHY I come in here late at night...

what if I had missed this?

This is wonderful gal


LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

8 posted 2005-06-20 02:35 PM


midnight is only
a change of sky

grace fell somewhere over us
along the empty street

still and cold
again and again

escaping between spaces
Fantastic bittersweet moment you've brought to life...exceptional writing there lady!

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
9 posted 2005-06-20 02:59 PM


I really like this poem alot.

-Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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