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Member Rara Avis

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0 posted 2005-06-14 11:37 PM

waiting, tense
still perched on the wall
gray, ready
dove watches
ready…gray…waiting…tense…perched
in her own shadow

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1 posted 2005-06-14 11:39 PM

Snow....boy am I glad I decided to take a fresh look at your work. Finding this form alone made it worthwhile.

Every group has its assets....some, like you, are hidden treasures.

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2 posted 2005-06-14 11:42 PM

Oh, and here are the instructions our lady of the ice gave:

"this is called a Shadorma, it's a Spanish form.
6 lines with a syllable count of 3/5/3/3/7/5, if
anyone is interested in trying it."

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suthern

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3 posted 2005-06-15 09:18 AM

You're a treasure yourself, yanno. *G* And this is absolutely beautiful!!!

Being the wordy type, I think I'd rather read them than try to write them... but I hope you both continue! *S*

LeeJ
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4 posted 2005-06-15 09:27 AM

astounding, and I to, love the form...of what you speak of...hehe

seriously, this was in it's own class...and well done!

Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2005-06-15 09:31 AM

I have always been a fan of Snow's work and this form is one of those reasons Ed. Thank you for gifting us with another poet who does this form extremely well and I hope we see more of these from you!

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

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6 posted 2005-06-15 10:02 AM

good job
enjoyed
bernie

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Bernie Slicker

Martie

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7 posted 2005-06-15 11:08 AM

Ed

As you know, I love doves. This really captures them!

Ericc
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8 posted 2005-06-15 12:55 PM

Awesome write Ed!

Eric

Marge Tindal

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9 posted 2005-06-15 01:21 PM

Ed~
Fantabulous !!!!

And our LadySnow IS a treasure (hidden or not) ... thank you for this~

LadySnow ... I visit your site often~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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